Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I did."). Then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and improve tense consistency (use past tense for childhood). For example, explain who gave the bike, when you received it, and why it was special with one or two clear reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My father gave me a blue bike when I was in Grade 1 because I worked hard and got excellent grades. I remember riding it to visit my friends around the neighborhood, and it made me feel proud and independent.

Sugestão: Make your answer more fluent and specific. Begin with a clear opinion ("Yes, I think so.") then give one or two concrete reasons with linking words ("because" or "for example"). Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and use clearer vocabulary (e.g. "short distances" instead of "not far away").

Exemplo: Yes, I think so. Bicycles are very common because they are cheap and convenient for short distances. For example, many people cycle to local markets or schools since traffic is heavy and parking is difficult.

× Yes, I have a bike and that's what's the the bike, the bike that's my father gave to me since I was young, like Grade 1 due to I got a great score that I can get a grade, I can get a school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike; it was the bike my father gave me when I was young, in Grade 1, because I got a great score and was able to get into the school.

The response refers to the past (childhood), so present tense 'have' is incorrect. Use past tense 'had'. 'Since' is misused; use 'when' for a specific past time. Redundant and unclear phrases ('that's what's the the bike') should be simplified. 'Gave to me' is more natural as 'gave me'. The clause about scoring should use past simple ('got') and the result 'was able to get into the school' clarifies meaning. Suggestions: use consistent past tense for childhood events, remove redundancies, and use 'when' for specific past moments.

× Yes, I think, 'cause in my country there are have a lot of bike in the road, because it's really convenient for riding to some place that not far away from the place that notary.

✓ Yes, I think so, because in my country there are a lot of bikes on the road; it's really convenient for riding to places that are not far away.

Multiple agreement and word-choice issues: 'there are have' is incorrect — choose either 'there are' or 'there is'; use 'there are' for plural. 'A lot of bike' needs plural 'bikes'. Preposition 'in the road' should be 'on the road'. 'Some place' should be plural 'places' when speaking generally. 'That not far away from the place that notary' is unclear; use 'that are not far away' for relative clause matching plural 'places'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, pluralize countable nouns, use correct prepositions ('on the road'), and simplify unclear phrases.