Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct tense and phrasing, add one specific detail and a linking phrase. Avoid repeating the question. Use past tense consistently and replace vague phrase "society" with "neighbourhood" or "around my area."

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike and I used to ride it with my friends around my neighbourhood every afternoon, which helped me become confident on the road.

Sugestão: Organise your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Use concrete examples (e.g. bike modifications, delivery riders) and correct grammar (present simple).

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For one thing, many people use motorbikes for daily transport because they are affordable and convenient; additionally, a growing number of young people customise their bikes and post videos online to earn money, especially on social media platforms.

× I have a bike and I used to ride with my friends all around the society where I live.

✓ I had a bike and I used to ride with my friends all around the neighborhood where I lived.

The examiner asked about childhood (past), so verb tenses should be past. 'I have' is present; change to 'I had'. 'Where I live' is present; change to 'where I lived'. Also 'society' is awkward in this context; 'neighborhood' is a natural English choice. Use consistent past tense for clarity.

× Most of the people here, most there are more like there are most of the people who are making content by as they have modified their bikes in my country and they're making content and earning through it.

✓ Bikes are popular here. Many people modify their bikes and make content about them; they earn money from that.

Original sentence is disfluent and contains repetitions and incorrect structure. Simplify into clear sentences: 'Many people modify their bikes and make content about them' states the idea concisely. 'Are making' is present continuous which can be acceptable, but simple present 'make' expresses general fact better. Remove redundant phrases ('most of the people' repeated) and clarify 'earning through it' to 'earn money from that.' This fixes sentence structure and improves clarity.