Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve accuracy, coherence and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct obvious mistakes (e.g., 'write' → 'ride'), avoid unnecessary repetition, and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so').

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had an orange bike when I was about 13 because my parents gave it to me for my birthday. I rode it every spring and summer to visit friends and explore the neighbourhood, and I felt very proud because I was the only child on my street who owned a bike.

Sugestão: Make answers more fluent and complete. Begin with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons and a brief comparison using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'because', 'nowadays'). Fix unfinished sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'commute', 'recreation').

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are much more popular now. Nowadays many people use bikes to commute to work, go shopping or cycle for recreation because cities have added bike lanes and cycling is cheaper than driving. However, a few years ago cycling was rare because most people preferred cars and public transport.

× I used to write it every day when the spring came and I felt very proud because I was the only one who had his own bike.

✓ I used to ride it every day when spring came and I felt very proud because I was the only one who had my own bike.

The verb 'write' is incorrect in context; the student likely meant 'ride' (verb meaning to travel by bike). Also, 'the spring' is unnatural here; 'spring' without 'the' is standard when speaking about the season in general (Grammar Problem Type 11 'Incorrect use of prepositions' and Type 22 'Article errors' could apply, but primary issue is wrong verb form/word choice fitting 'Verb + -ing form' because 'ride' should be used in continuous 'ride' or 'used to ride'). Additionally, 'his own bike' is wrong pronoun reference for the speaker; change to 'my own bike' to match the first-person subject (Incorrect use of pronouns). Suggestion: use 'ride' with 'used to' for habitual past actions, omit 'the' before seasons, and keep pronouns consistent with the subject.

× I used to write it every day when the spring came and I felt very proud because I was the only one who had his own bike.

✓ I used to ride it every day when spring came and I felt very proud because I was the only one who had my own bike.

The original sentence uses 'his' which is a third-person possessive, but the speaker is first person ('I'), so 'my' is required for consistency. Also replace 'write' with 'ride' to match meaning and remove 'the' before 'spring'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree with the subject and choose verbs that match intended actions.

× I used to write it every day when the spring came and I felt very proud because I was the only one who had his own bike.

✓ I used to ride it every day when spring came and I felt very proud because I was the only one who had my own bike.

Using 'the' before seasons is usually unnecessary in English when referring to seasons in general; say 'spring' not 'the spring'. Also corrected verb and pronoun as above. Suggestion: omit 'the' before seasons in general statements.

× But a couple of years ago it was a rare sight. People didn't ride bikes, they preferred cars or.

✓ But a couple of years ago it was a rare sight; people didn't ride bikes, they preferred cars.

The original ends with an incomplete clause 'or.' This is a sentence structure error—an unfinished coordination. Remove the trailing 'or' or complete the comparison (for example, 'or used public transport'). Also better to connect clauses with a semicolon or conjunction. Suggestion: finish coordinated items or remove the conjunction if nothing follows.

× Well, actually now they're very popular. A lot of people ride bikes just for fun or to work or they go shopping.

✓ Well, actually now they're very popular. A lot of people ride bikes just for fun, to go to work, or to go shopping.

The original mixes parallel structures inconsistently: 'ride bikes just for fun or to work or they go shopping' breaks parallelism and is awkward. Use parallel infinitive phrases 'for fun, to go to work, or to go shopping' to maintain consistent structure. Suggestion: keep parallel structures when listing purposes and avoid inserting a new subject ('they') mid-list.