Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Also, use correct verb tenses and prepositions to improve naturalness.

Exemplo: I am currently a postgraduate student at UNSW, majoring in accounting and finance. Before starting my degree here in Sydney, I worked as an Accounting Officer in Hong Kong.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Use a clear topic sentence and add specific supporting details with linking words to improve coherence. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure correct sentence structure.

Exemplo: I study at UNSW in Sydney, which is a great place for students. The campus has many buildings that provide ample study spaces, and the university has a strong reputation in the city.

Sugestão: Your answer is positive but repetitive and includes many filler words. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Provide specific details to support your opinion.

Exemplo: Yes, it is definitely a good place to study because the campus offers many buildings with dedicated study spaces. Moreover, all students have access to Wi-Fi and various facilities that support research activities.

Sugestão: Your answer is vague and contains many filler words. Be specific about the changes you want and explain how they would improve your experience. Use linking words to organize your ideas clearly.

Exemplo: I would like the university to improve some facilities, such as adding more comfortable study areas and better cafeteria services. These changes would make campus life more convenient and enjoyable for students.

Sugestão: Your answer communicates your goals but has grammatical errors and redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Avoid filler words and ensure correct verb forms.

Exemplo: My future study plan is to prepare for the CA or CPA qualification because I want to become a certified professional accountant. Passing these exams will help me achieve my career goals.

× I'm currently a postgrad student at UNSW and my major in accounting and finance.

✓ I'm currently a postgrad student at UNSW and my major is in accounting and finance.

The verb 'major' requires the verb 'is' to link the subject to the field of study. The original sentence misses the verb 'is', making it grammatically incorrect.

× So before I come to UH Sydney start my Postgres degree, I used to work at UH Accounting Officer at Hong Kong.

✓ So before I came to UNSW Sydney to start my Postgrad degree, I used to work as an Accounting Officer in Hong Kong.

The verb 'come' should be in past tense 'came' to match the past event. Also, 'start' needs 'to' before it. 'Postgres' is corrected to 'Postgrad'. 'At UH Accounting Officer' is incorrect; it should be 'as an Accounting Officer'. 'At Hong Kong' should be 'in Hong Kong' because 'in' is used for cities and countries.

× I start my Postgres study at UNSW which located in Sydney, so this is a good place to study UH.

✓ I started my Postgrad study at UNSW, which is located in Sydney, so this is a good place to study.

The verb 'start' should be in past tense 'started' to indicate a completed action. 'Which located' needs the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct. 'Postgres' corrected to 'Postgrad'. 'Study UH' is unclear and unnecessary; 'to study' suffices.

× There are lots of uh building offers the study space and is a group reputation in Sydney.

✓ There are lots of buildings offering study spaces and it has a good reputation in Sydney.

'Building' should be plural 'buildings' to match 'lots of'. 'Offers' should be 'offering' to correctly describe the buildings. 'Is a group reputation' is incorrect; it should be 'it has a good reputation'.

× So in the campus, there are lots of building, uh, including the study space.

✓ So on the campus, there are lots of buildings, including study spaces.

'Building' should be plural 'buildings' to match 'lots of'. 'In the campus' should be 'on the campus' as 'on' is used for locations like campuses. 'The study space' should be plural 'study spaces' to match 'lots of buildings'.

× And so, uh, all students can access the, uh, Wi-Fi to use, uh, the facilities to do the research.

✓ And so, all students can access the Wi-Fi and use the facilities to do research.

The phrase 'access the Wi-Fi to use the facilities' is awkward. It's better to say 'access the Wi-Fi and use the facilities'. Also, 'do the research' is better as 'do research' without 'the'.

× I like the place where I study to make some changes, just like uh, maybe enhance some uh, facility, which may provide more uh, convenience experience for us, uh, which also can improve my experience in the campus.

✓ I would like the place where I study to make some changes, such as enhancing some facilities, which may provide a more convenient experience for us and also improve my experience on campus.

'I like the place... to make changes' is incorrect; 'I would like' expresses desire better. 'Enhance some facility' should be 'enhancing some facilities' for plural and gerund form. 'Convenience experience' should be 'convenient experience'. 'In the campus' should be 'on campus'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× My future study plan is to preparing the CA or CPA study 'cause I want to pass the course and get a certificate to prove me to become a professional accountant.

✓ My future study plan is to prepare for the CA or CPA exams because I want to pass the courses and get a certificate to prove that I can become a professional accountant.

'Is to preparing' is incorrect; it should be 'is to prepare'. 'CA or CPA study' is better as 'CA or CPA exams'. 'Cause' should be 'because' for formal speech. 'Prove me to become' is incorrect; it should be 'prove that I can become'.

× Umm I want to be a professional accountant in the future.

✓ I want to be a professional accountant in the future.

The sentence is grammatically correct except for the filler 'Umm' which is unnecessary in formal speech.