Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding filler words and unnecessary details. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add brief supporting details. For example, avoid starting with "Go" and focus on clear sentence structure.

Exemplo: I'm currently a student at Seattle University, studying a Computer Science certificate program. Previously, I worked full-time as a game designer but returned to school after being laid off in March.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words like "uh" and incomplete sentences. Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to explain your reasons. Also, avoid repeating the question in your answer.

Exemplo: I study at Seattle University in Washington State. I chose it because I was already working in Seattle and didn't want to relocate. Also, it's the closest reputable school to me.

Sugestão: Make your answer more structured and avoid informal phrases like "like" and "you know." Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Complete your sentences fully to improve clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a great place to study, especially for computer science. Seattle is known for its technology companies such as Amazon and Microsoft. Additionally, some of my professors work for companies like Google, which gives me valuable experience.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain your reasons. Be specific about the challenges you face and complete your thoughts.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like the living costs in the city to be lower. Since the school is downtown, rent is very expensive for students like me. Moreover, I don't have a car, so if I move to a rural area for cheaper rent, commuting takes a long time.

Sugestão: Try to avoid filler words such as "like," "uh," and "umm." Provide a clear and complete answer with linking words to explain your plans. Be specific about what you intend to do after finishing your program.

Exemplo: My future plan is to complete the computer science certificate program to gain a solid foundation. After that, I plan to stop formal schooling but continue self-teaching, especially focusing on gameplay development.

× I'm studying Seattle University and my major is Computer Science certificate program.

✓ I'm studying at Seattle University and my major is the Computer Science certificate program.

The verb 'study' when referring to attending an institution requires the preposition 'at'. Also, 'Computer Science certificate program' needs the definite article 'the' to specify the program. Adding 'at' clarifies the location of study, and 'the' specifies the particular program.

× I'm studying Seattle University and my major is Computer Science certificate program.

✓ I'm studying at Seattle University and my major is the Computer Science certificate program.

The phrase 'Computer Science certificate program' is singular and should be preceded by the definite article 'the' to indicate a specific program. This correction ensures proper singular noun usage with the article.

× While I study in Seattle, in uh, Seattle University, Washington State.

✓ I study in Seattle, at Seattle University, Washington State.

The phrase 'While I study' is incomplete and awkward here. Removing 'While' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct. Also, 'at' is the correct preposition for institutions.

× I'm studying Seattle University and my major is Computer Science certificate program.

✓ I'm studying at Seattle University and my major is the Computer Science certificate program.

The verb 'study' requires the preposition 'at' when referring to an institution. Omitting 'at' is incorrect.

× I don't wanna relocate to another state.

✓ I don't want to relocate to another state.

The contraction 'wanna' is informal and not appropriate in formal speech or writing. Using 'want to' is grammatically correct and more formal.

× Seattle University seems like a legit school, which is like the closest one to me.

✓ Seattle University seems like a legitimate school, which is the closest one to me.

The word 'legit' is informal slang; 'legitimate' is the correct adjective. Also, 'like' is overused and unnecessary here.

× They have Amazon, Microsoft, Indeed, and stuff like that. So they're my professors.

✓ There are companies like Amazon, Microsoft, Indeed, and so on nearby. Some of my professors work for these companies.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Clarifying that these are companies nearby and that some professors work for them improves clarity and grammar.

× I hope the living costs for the city can be lower.

✓ I hope the living costs in the city can be lower.

The correct preposition to indicate location is 'in' rather than 'for' when referring to living costs in a city.

× If I want to go for cheaper rent, I have to leave in like a rural area.

✓ If I want to find cheaper rent, I have to live in a rural area.

The phrase 'go for cheaper rent' is incorrect; 'find cheaper rent' is better. Also, 'leave in' is incorrect; it should be 'live in' when referring to residing somewhere.

× But then it's gonna take me like a long time to.

✓ But then it's going to take me a long time to commute.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding 'commute' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× My future study plan is to finish studying for the computer science certificate program.

✓ My future study plan is to finish studying the computer science certificate program.

The preposition 'for' is unnecessary after 'studying' in this context. Removing it makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× But then I'll still self teaching myself, uh, and I want to learn more about gameplay development, uh, with umm.

✓ But then I'll still be teaching myself, and I want to learn more about gameplay development.

The phrase 'self teaching myself' is redundant and incorrect. The correct form is 'be teaching myself'. Also, removing filler words improves clarity.