Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答时应避免重复表达，如“finance, finance management”，并且句子结构可以更自然流畅。可以简洁明了地介绍自己身份和专业。

Exemplo: I am currently a freshman at university, majoring in finance management.

Sugestão: 回答中时态不一致，且表达不够完整。应使用现在时态描述当前学习地点，并且句子应更完整自然。

Exemplo: I study in Zhuji, a small city in Zhejiang province.

Sugestão: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。应使用连贯的句子，避免语法错误，并且提供具体细节支持观点。

Exemplo: Yes, it is a good place to study because the city is small and quiet. The library is large and beautiful, which makes it a comfortable environment for studying. Also, the people there are friendly.

Sugestão: 回答中时态错误和表达不清晰。应使用正确时态和句子结构，明确表达想法，并提供具体建议。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like the school to provide more public transportation options, such as bikes, because the school buildings are quite far apart.

Sugestão: 回答中语法和表达不准确，句子不连贯。应清晰表达未来计划，使用正确语法，并提供理由。

Exemplo: I plan to study abroad to pursue a master's degree in my major. I believe this will help me gain deeper knowledge and improve my job prospects.

× I'm major in finance, finance management.

✓ I'm majoring in finance, finance management.

这里动词'major'需要用现在分词形式'majoring'，表示正在学习某专业。动词后接-ing形式表示正在进行的动作。

× I studied in Zhuji also, uh, Zhejiang's, uh, small city.

✓ I studied in Zhuji, a small city in Zhejiang.

句子中'Zhejiang's, uh, small city'表达不清，应改为'a small city in Zhejiang'，更符合英语表达习惯。

× this city is not very big, so it is very silent and peaceful study.

✓ this city is not very big, so it is very quiet and peaceful for studying.

形容词'silent'通常指无声，描述环境时用'quiet'更合适；'peaceful study'结构不正确，应改为'peaceful for studying'。

× There is a enjoyable scene on the library, there is very beautiful and big, and it is a good place for me to study and people there are likely.

✓ There is an enjoyable scene at the library; it is very beautiful and big, and it is a good place for me to study. The people there are friendly.

句子结构混乱，'a enjoyable'应为'an enjoyable'，'on the library'应为'at the library'，'people there are likely'表达错误，应为'people there are friendly'。

× my school didn't have many public transport like bikes, so if you want to go to the school building is very far and you need to went there.

✓ My school doesn't have much public transport like bikes, so if you want to go to the school building, it is very far and you need to go there.

时态应与上下文一致，使用一般现在时；'didn't have'改为'doesn't have'；'many public transport'应为'much public transport'；'need to went'应为'need to go'。

× I think I would go abroad to get the master degree and two deeper study my major.

✓ I think I will go abroad to get a master's degree and study my major more deeply.

表达未来计划时应使用一般将来时'will'；'master degree'前需加冠词'a'且应为'master's degree'；'two deeper study'结构错误，应为'study more deeply'。

× I think it is necessary because UMM get a master degree now.

✓ I think it is necessary because UMM offers a master's degree now.

句子结构不完整，'UMM get'应改为'UMM offers'，且'master degree'前需加冠词'a'且应为'master's degree'。

× UMM helps me find job and study deeper in my major.

✓ UMM helps me find a job and study more deeply in my major.

'find job'缺少冠词，应为'find a job'；'study deeper'应改为'study more deeply'，副词修饰动词。