Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答时语言不够自然，有语法和表达错误，如“lend AI hope to lend a decent and well paid job”不通顺。建议简化表达，避免重复，保持句子简洁流畅。

Exemplo: I am currently a student at Jisha University, majoring in Data Science and Big Data. I chose this major because it offers excellent job prospects and I hope to secure a well-paid job in the future.

Sugestão: 回答中有许多语气词和重复，影响流畅性。建议减少填充词，使用连词使句子更连贯，并具体说明图书馆的优点。

Exemplo: I prefer studying in the library because it has a quiet and peaceful atmosphere that helps me concentrate. Moreover, the library offers a wide range of books, which makes it easy and convenient for me to access the information I need.

Sugestão: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议直接回答问题，使用连接词，具体说明图书馆的优势和学习小组的好处。

Exemplo: Yes, the library is definitely the best place to study compared to my accommodation or classroom. Additionally, I can join study groups with my friends there, which helps us encourage and motivate each other.

Sugestão: 回答中有重复和语法错误，如“increase enhance the fast Wi-Fi”。建议简化句子，使用正确的词汇表达具体的改进建议。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like the school to expand the library by adding more seats, improving the Wi-Fi speed, and providing more computers, as these would greatly help my studies.

Sugestão: 回答中有多余的语气词，表达不够简洁。建议去除填充词，使用连词使句子更流畅，并具体说明研究兴趣。

Exemplo: I am currently preparing to pursue a master's degree soon. If possible, I would like to continue to a PhD because I am very interested in researching cybersecurity and machine learning.

× I can lend AI hope to lend a decent and well paid job in the future.

✓ I can hope to get a decent and well-paid job in the future.

这里“lend AI hope to lend”表达不正确，且“job”前缺少冠词，且“well paid”应连写为“well-paid”。应使用“hope to get”表达希望获得某物。

× Personally, I prefer to study in the library with focused and peaceful atmosphere which help me to stay focused umm on my study and UH and their wide range of books from the library allow me to get the knowledge from the books umm easily and conveniently.

✓ Personally, I prefer to study in the library with a focused and peaceful atmosphere which helps me to stay focused on my study, and the wide range of books in the library allows me to get knowledge from the books easily and conveniently.

缺少冠词“a”修饰“focused and peaceful atmosphere”，动词“help”应为第三人称单数“helps”，代词“their”用错，应为“the”，动词“allow”应为“allows”。

× which help me to stay focused umm on my study

✓ which helps me to stay focused on my study

关系代词指代单数名词“atmosphere”，动词应使用第三人称单数形式“helps”。

× their wide range of books from the library allow me to get the knowledge from the books umm easily and conveniently.

✓ the wide range of books in the library allows me to get knowledge from the books easily and conveniently.

主语“wide range”是单数，动词应为第三人称单数“allows”，且“their”用错，应为“the”，介词应为“in the library”。

× Also, I can join a study groups with my friends so we can encourage and motivate each other from our studies and get them.

✓ Also, I can join study groups with my friends so we can encourage and motivate each other in our studies and get them.

“a study groups”中“a”与复数“groups”不匹配，应去掉“a”。

× so we can encourage and motivate each other from our studies and get them.

✓ so we can encourage and motivate each other in our studies and get them.

“encourage and motivate each other from our studies”中介词“from”用错，应为“in”。

× I would appreciate if my school can extend the library and provide more seats in the library as well as increase enhance the fast Wi-Fi and more computer in the library, which are very useful for my own study for the student study.

✓ I would appreciate it if my school could extend the library and provide more seats, as well as enhance the fast Wi-Fi and add more computers in the library, which are very useful for my own study and for students' study.

“more computer”应为复数“more computers”，动词“increase enhance”重复，应选用“enhance”，句子结构不完整，缺少“it”作形式宾语。

× I would appreciate if my school can extend the library and provide more seats in the library as well as increase enhance the fast Wi-Fi and more computer in the library, which are very useful for my own study for the student study.

✓ I would appreciate it if my school could extend the library and provide more seats, as well as enhance the fast Wi-Fi and add more computers in the library, which are very useful for my own study and for students' study.

表达假设语气时，条件从句中应使用“could”而非“can”。

× I'm currently prepared for the master degree in the near future, umm and if I have opportunity, I'm really, I really want to go for PhD in the future 'cause I'm really into doing research on cybersecurity or machine learning and I think, umm, that's it.

✓ I'm currently preparing for a master's degree in the near future, and if I have the opportunity, I really want to go for a PhD in the future because I'm really into doing research on cybersecurity or machine learning, and I think that's it.

“prepared”应为现在进行时“preparing”，表示正在准备；“master degree”前应加冠词“a”，且应为“master's degree”；“if I have opportunity”缺少冠词，应为“if I have the opportunity”；“'cause”应为“because”更正式。