Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Also, start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: I am currently working as a security guard with VP Protection in Toronto. This job is rewarding because it helps me improve my communication and problem-solving skills.

Sugestão: Use the present perfect or simple past tense correctly and avoid redundancy. Provide a clear topic sentence and add specific details smoothly with linking words.

Exemplo: I completed a two-year Diploma in Business Education at Kander College's Brampton campus from 2021 to 2022.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like 'also' or 'furthermore' to connect ideas. Be specific about how the college helped you and describe your experiences clearly.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a great place to study. I developed practical skills and, furthermore, improved my communication and problem-solving abilities. I also met people from diverse cultures, which enriched my experience.

Sugestão: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use linking words to organize your answer logically. Avoid vague phrases like 'and so on' and be specific about the benefits. Also, correct verb tenses and plural forms.

Exemplo: No, I wouldn't suggest any changes because my college provides a peaceful environment and valuable benefits such as vision and medical care. Additionally, it offers both practical and theoretical knowledge that helps students succeed.

Sugestão: Make your answer more fluent and clear by removing filler words and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your plans.

Exemplo: Currently, I plan to study nursing because I want to become a nurse in the future. I recently discussed this with my husband and have already researched colleges. I intend to start my studies in 2026.

× At present I'm on the work permit.

✓ At present, I have a work permit.

The phrase 'on the work permit' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'have' to indicate possession of a work permit. 'On' is not used in this context.

× it is very amazing job.

✓ it is a very amazing job.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'very amazing job' because 'job' is a singular countable noun.

× I completed my two years Diploma of Business Education in from 2021 to 2022.

✓ I completed my two-year Diploma of Business Education from 2021 to 2022.

The phrase 'in from' is incorrect; only 'from' is needed to indicate the time period. Also, 'two years Diploma' should be 'two-year Diploma' as a compound adjective.

× it is a very good place to study in this college.

✓ it is a very good place to study at this college.

The correct preposition to indicate location with 'college' is 'at' rather than 'in'.

× I met with, uh, new people who belongs to uh, different culture.

✓ I met new people who belong to different cultures.

The verb 'belongs' should be plural 'belong' to agree with plural subject 'people'. Also, 'culture' should be plural 'cultures' to match 'different'.

× No, I do not want to make any changes whereas studied because my college always provide a peaceful and calmness environment to student and also provide benefits for example vision, doctor care and so on.

✓ No, I do not want to make any changes to my studies because my college always provides a peaceful and calm environment to students and also provides benefits such as vision and doctor care.

'Whereas studied' is incorrect; it should be 'to my studies'. 'Provide' should be 'provides' to agree with singular subject 'college'. 'Calmness environment' should be 'calm environment'. 'Student' should be plural 'students'. 'For example' should be 'such as'.

× They also provide a practical knowledge as well as theoretical knowledge which will will help to student.

✓ They also provide practical knowledge as well as theoretical knowledge which will help students.

'A practical knowledge' is incorrect; 'knowledge' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. 'Will will' is a repetition error. 'Help to student' should be 'help students' without 'to'.

× At present, I want to take a study of doctor.

✓ At present, I want to study to become a doctor.

The phrase 'take a study of doctor' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'study to become a doctor'.

× I want to become a nurse in future.

✓ I want to become a nurse in the future.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future' to be grammatically correct.

× So after, uh, recently, I just discussed with my husband that I want to continue my study.

✓ So recently, I just discussed with my husband that I want to continue my studies.

'After, recently' is redundant and awkward; 'recently' alone is sufficient. 'Continue my study' should be 'continue my studies'.

× Uh, and I already checked the college which I wanted, so I started my study in 2026.

✓ Uh, and I have already checked the college I want, so I will start my studies in 2026.

'Checked' should be present perfect 'have checked' to indicate recent action. 'Which I wanted' should be 'I want' to indicate current desire. 'Started' should be future tense 'will start' because 2026 is in the future. 'My study' should be plural 'my studies'.