Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer needs to be more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add brief supporting details. Avoid redundancy and incorrect verb tenses. For example, use 'I recently graduated and now I work at Domino's as a customer service representative.'

Exemplo: I recently graduated two months ago, and now I work at Domino's as a customer service representative.

Sugestão: Your answer should be clearer and more structured. Begin with a direct response, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary usage is important. For example, say 'I studied at University Canada, WI, where I completed my master's degree in business. This helped me improve my communication skills and gain real-life experience by working with clients.'

Exemplo: I studied at University Canada, WI, where I completed my master's degree in business. This helped me improve my communication skills and gain real-life experience by working with clients.

Sugestão: Your answer should be more fluent and coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar. For example, 'Yes, it is a good place to study because I have a keen interest in business. Moreover, the university offers many facilities and scholarships for students with good grades.'

Exemplo: Yes, it is a good place to study because I have a keen interest in business. Moreover, the university offers many facilities and scholarships for students with good grades.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain the issue with specific details using linking words. For example, 'Yes, I would like some changes, especially regarding the cafe. Although a new cafe was added, it often runs out of food when students need it, so I think they should increase the food availability.'

Exemplo: Yes, I would like some changes, especially regarding the cafe. Although a new cafe was added, it often runs out of food when students need it, so I think they should increase the food availability.

Sugestão: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Begin with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. For example, 'I have finished my master's degree, and I want to specialize in marketing. Therefore, I plan to take extra courses to improve my marketing skills and eventually become a marketing manager.'

Exemplo: I have finished my master's degree, and I want to specialize in marketing. Therefore, I plan to take extra courses to improve my marketing skills and eventually become a marketing manager.

× I have just finished my graduation with Flying Colors two months ago and right now I currently working at company Domino's.

✓ I just finished my graduation with Flying Colors two months ago and right now I am currently working at the company Domino's.

The phrase 'have just finished' with 'two months ago' is incorrect because 'ago' requires simple past tense, not present perfect. Also, 'I currently working' is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' for present continuous tense. The correct form is 'I am currently working'. Additionally, 'company Domino's' needs the definite article 'the' before 'company'.

× I'm worked as the customer service representative.

✓ I worked as the customer service representative.

The phrase 'I'm worked' is incorrect because 'I'm' is a contraction of 'I am' which cannot be followed by the past tense verb 'worked'. The correct simple past tense is 'I worked'.

× I pursued my study from University Canada, WI, have done my master degree in a business and it's helped me to improve my communication skills and go through the business experience.

✓ I pursued my studies at University Canada, WI, completed my master's degree in business, and it has helped me improve my communication skills and gain business experience.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'pursued my study' should be 'pursued my studies'; 'from University Canada' should be 'at University Canada'; 'have done my master degree' should be 'completed my master's degree'; 'in a business' should be 'in business'; 'go through the business experience' is awkward and should be 'gain business experience'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs proper conjunctions.

× I did work with real life client.

✓ I worked with real-life clients.

The phrase 'did work' is unnecessary here; simple past 'worked' suffices. 'Real life' should be hyphenated as 'real-life' when used as an adjective. 'Client' should be plural 'clients' to match the context.

× Yes, it was the good place for the study.

✓ Yes, it was a good place to study.

The definite article 'the' is incorrect here; 'a' is appropriate for general statements. Also, 'for the study' should be 'to study' for natural English expression.

× I have a keen interest in business and so that's why I choose this place and as the very good university and provide the number of facility to the students.

✓ I have a keen interest in business, so that's why I chose this place. It is a very good university and provides a number of facilities to the students.

'Choose' should be past tense 'chose' to match past context. 'As the very good university' is incorrect; it should be 'It is a very good university'. 'Provide the number of facility' should be 'provides a number of facilities'. Also, sentence structure is improved by splitting into two sentences.

× If the students have a good grades and they have they can get the opportunity of scholarship.

✓ If students have good grades, they can get the opportunity for a scholarship.

'The students' is too specific; 'students' is better here. 'A good grades' is incorrect; 'good grades' without article is correct. 'They have they can get' is redundant; remove 'they have'. 'Opportunity of scholarship' should be 'opportunity for a scholarship'.

× I think to be honest, I need, I want to make some changes, especially about the cafe.

✓ I think, to be honest, I need to make some changes, especially regarding the cafe.

The phrase 'I need, I want to make' is redundant; 'I need to make' suffices. 'Especially about the cafe' is better expressed as 'especially regarding the cafe'.

× There was a new cafe in the institutes and whenever students need to eat something and there was no availability.

✓ There was a new cafe in the institute, but whenever students needed to eat something, there was no availability.

'Institutes' should be singular 'institute' if referring to one place. The sentence is a run-on and needs conjunction 'but'. 'Students need' should be past tense 'students needed' to match 'was'. 'No availability' is vague but acceptable here.

× So I think it should be add here.

✓ So I think it should be added here.

The verb after 'should be' must be in past participle form; 'add' should be 'added'.

× Yes to now I finished my master degree and I want to gain I want to become master in the marketing.

✓ Yes, up to now I have finished my master's degree and I want to become a master in marketing.

'To now' is better expressed as 'up to now'. 'Finished' should be present perfect 'have finished' to indicate recent completion. 'Master degree' should be 'master's degree'. 'Become master in the marketing' should be 'become a master in marketing'.

× I have a plan to take some extra another courses in other colors to improve my marketing skill and want to become marketing manager.

✓ I plan to take some additional courses in other fields to improve my marketing skills and want to become a marketing manager.

'Some extra another courses' is incorrect; 'some additional courses' is correct. 'In other colors' is likely a mishearing or error; 'in other fields' is appropriate. 'Marketing skill' should be plural 'marketing skills'. 'Become marketing manager' needs article 'a marketing manager'.