Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不自然。建议使用更准确的时态和词汇，避免拼写错误，并且使句子更简洁自然。

Exemplo: I am currently a junior student studying Tourism Management in Bangkok, and I really enjoy my studies.

Sugestão: 回答中表达不清晰，句子结构混乱。建议直接说明学校名称或类型，并用连词使句子连贯。

Exemplo: I study at a high-quality university here in Bangkok, which is well-known in Thailand.

Sugestão: 表达不够准确，语法和词汇使用有误。建议用更准确的表达说明教师资质和学习资源，并使用连接词。

Exemplo: Yes, I believe it is a good place to study because many teachers have doctoral degrees, and the university provides excellent learning resources.

Sugestão: 回答不够清晰，表达混乱。建议明确说明想要改变的方面，并用连词使句子更连贯。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like the school to create a more relaxed atmosphere because currently, the intense study environment makes it hard to enjoy learning.

Sugestão: 句子结构不完整且重复。建议简洁明了地表达未来计划，并使用连接词。

Exemplo: My future study plan is to pass the IELTS test so that I can pursue a doctoral degree.

× Yeah, I'm a student in Bangkok as a tourism management and I'm junior skill now and I'm enjoying my study.

✓ Yeah, I'm a student in Bangkok studying tourism management and I'm a junior now and I'm enjoying my studies.

The phrase 'as a tourism management' is incorrect; it should be 'studying tourism management' to indicate the field of study. 'Junior skill' is incorrect; the correct term is 'a junior' to indicate the year in school. 'My study' should be pluralized to 'my studies' to refer to academic work in general.

× Well, I study in Bangkok, it's those two here and it's a high quality university in Thailand.

✓ Well, I study in Bangkok; it's close to here and it's a high-quality university in Thailand.

The phrase 'it's those two here' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'it's close to here' to indicate proximity. Also, 'high quality' should be hyphenated as 'high-quality' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× Yes, I recall that there are many teachers doctor degree. So I think it has a good quality to study and also there are many good resources to study.

✓ Yes, I recall that there are many teachers with doctor degrees. So I think it has good quality education and also many good resources for studying.

The phrase 'teachers doctor degree' is incorrect; it should be 'teachers with doctor degrees' to indicate possession. 'Good quality to study' is awkward; 'good quality education' is clearer. 'Resources to study' should be 'resources for studying' to use the correct preposition.

× Yes, absolutely. You know in the school are many students like study and you can feel the study atmosphere is very heavy.

✓ Yes, absolutely. You know, in the school there are many students who like to study and you can feel the study atmosphere is very intense.

The sentence structure is incorrect; 'in the school are many students like study' should be 'in the school there are many students who like to study'. Also, 'study atmosphere is very heavy' is unnatural; 'intense' better describes a serious study environment.

× So you can't control yourself to enjoy that. I think that's really good.

✓ So you can't help but focus on studying. I think that's really good.

The phrase 'can't control yourself to enjoy that' is unclear and awkward. The intended meaning is likely that the atmosphere encourages focus on studying, so 'can't help but focus on studying' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, so this is because I want pass the IELTS test because I want upgrade my degree such as I want to go up to doctoral degree in my future plan.

✓ Yes, this is because I want to pass the IELTS test and upgrade my degree; for example, I want to pursue a doctoral degree in my future plans.

The modal verb 'want' should be followed by 'to' plus the base verb, so 'want pass' should be 'want to pass' and 'want upgrade' should be 'want to upgrade'. Also, 'go up to doctoral degree' is incorrect; 'pursue a doctoral degree' is the correct expression. 'In my future plan' should be pluralized to 'in my future plans'.