Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more concise and clear. Avoid unnecessary details that do not directly answer the question. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'bus' which should be 'but'.

Exemplo: I am currently working at a National Health Regulatory Authority, and I have recently applied to upgrade my qualification from a Higher Diploma to a Graduate Diploma.

Sugestão: Make your answer clearer and more grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Specify the mode of study clearly.

Exemplo: I study online through various resources, including your materials, and I have recently applied for a distance learning program.

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Use linking words to improve coherence. For example, start with a direct answer and then explain the reason.

Exemplo: I can't say yet because I haven't started the program. However, once I begin, I will be able to share my opinion.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas. Be more concise and clear.

Exemplo: Since the program is fully online, I haven't experienced it yet, so I can't suggest any changes at this time.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, correct the phrase 'Human Factor' to 'Human Factors'.

Exemplo: I plan to continue my studies and have recently applied for a postgraduate diploma in Human Factors in Patient Safety. However, I am still waiting to hear if I have been accepted.

× I'm working in a National Health regulatory authority and I have just recently submitted an application for Higher Diploma bus to Graduate diploma.

✓ I work in a National Health regulatory authority and I have just recently submitted an application for Higher Diploma but to Graduate Diploma.

The phrase 'I'm working' suggests a temporary action, but the context implies a permanent job, so simple present 'I work' is correct. Also, 'bus' is a typo and should be 'but'. 'Graduate diploma' should be capitalized as a proper noun.

× I self study online from you and other resources.

✓ I self-study online using your resources and others.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; 'using' better expresses the means of study. Also, 'self study' should be hyphenated as 'self-study' when used as a verb.

× Also the application for the program that I have registered recently as Education from Distance Learning.

✓ Also, I have recently registered an application for the program in Education through Distance Learning.

The phrase 'Education from Distance Learning' is awkward; 'Education through Distance Learning' is the correct prepositional phrase. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I don't know the answer for this question yet because I have not yet started the program.

✓ I don't know the answer to this question yet because I have not started the program yet.

The correct preposition with 'answer' is 'to' not 'for'. Also, 'have not yet started' is acceptable but 'have not started yet' is more natural.

× Only after enrollment in this program I can respond to your question.

✓ Only after enrollment in this program can I respond to your question.

Inversion is required after 'Only after...' for correct sentence structure.

× It's not in campus study, it is 100% online delivered education.

✓ It's not on-campus study; it is 100% online-delivered education.

The correct preposition is 'on-campus' as an adjective. Also, 'online-delivered' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective.

× I cannot suggest any changes yet because I still did not experience the study studying in this program.

✓ I cannot suggest any changes yet because I have not experienced studying in this program yet.

The phrase 'did not experience' should be present perfect 'have not experienced' to indicate an action up to now. Also, 'the study studying' is redundant; 'studying' alone suffices.

× However, I am not 100% sure that I'm going to be accepted in this program yet.

✓ However, I am not 100% sure that I will be accepted into this program yet.

The future tense 'will be accepted' is more formal and appropriate than 'going to be accepted' in this context. Also, the correct preposition is 'accepted into' a program.