Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is informative but a bit lengthy and slightly redundant. Try to be more concise and avoid unnecessary words like 'myself'. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add brief supporting details.

Exemplo: I work full-time as a nursing officer at Janakpuri Super Speciality Hospital. I graduated from Tasha University before starting this job.

Sugestão: Good answer with clear reasons. To improve, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid short, choppy sentences.

Exemplo: I usually study in my room when it is quiet, especially at night, because the calm environment helps me concentrate better.

Sugestão: Your answer is repetitive and a bit long. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

Exemplo: Yes, my bedroom is a good place to study because it has a table, a computer, and a flashlight, which allows me to study without disturbing others and concentrate well.

Sugestão: Your answer lacks clarity and has some grammatical errors. Try to explain your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to add a flow chart in my study area because it would help me follow my timetable more effectively and stay organized.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but can be improved by using clearer sentence structure and linking words. Avoid complex phrases like 'reach the epitome' and use simpler expressions.

Exemplo: In the future, I plan to pursue a master's degree and then complete the CRNA course, which is essential for advancing my career as a nurse anesthetist.

× I do work and I have already graduated myself from Tasha University and now I am working full time as a nursing officer in Janakpuri Super Speciality Hospital.

✓ I do work and I have already graduated from Tasha University and now I am working full time as a nursing officer in Janakpuri Super Speciality Hospital.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is incorrectly used here. 'Graduated' is a transitive verb that does not require a reflexive pronoun. The correct form is 'I have graduated from Tasha University.' Using 'myself' is unnecessary and grammatically incorrect in this context.

× I study in my room when there is no one.

✓ I study in my room when there is no one else.

The sentence is missing the word 'else' after 'no one' to complete the meaning. 'No one' alone is acceptable but 'no one else' clarifies that the room is empty of other people, which is the intended meaning here.

× I usually study at night because it is quiet and calming and I can concentrate better.

✓ I usually study at night because it is quiet and calming, and I can concentrate better.

A comma is needed before 'and' to separate two independent clauses for better clarity and correct sentence structure.

× Yes, my bedroom is a really good place to study because I have a table and a computer there with a flashlight so that I do not disturb any other person sleeping there and I can concentrate better in my room because of the better environment I get in my room.

✓ Yes, my bedroom is a really good place to study because I have a table and a computer there with a flashlight so that I do not disturb anyone else sleeping there, and I can concentrate better in my room because of the better environment I get there.

The phrase 'any other person' is better replaced with 'anyone else' for naturalness and correctness. Also, repeating 'in my room' twice is redundant; replacing the second with 'there' improves fluency.

× Yes, I would like to make changes to my study place.

✓ Yes, I would like to make changes in my study place.

The correct preposition with 'make changes' when referring to a location or area is 'in' rather than 'to'. 'Make changes in my study place' is more appropriate.

× For example, I would like to have a flow chart so that I can follow that chart.

✓ For example, I would like to have a flow chart so that I can follow it.

Repeating 'that chart' is redundant. Using the pronoun 'it' after introducing 'a flow chart' is more natural and avoids repetition.

× So it is important to have a chart in your room to get your timetable on process.

✓ So it is important to have a chart in your room to keep your timetable in process.

The phrase 'get your timetable on process' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'in' with 'process' to indicate ongoing progress. Also, 'keep your timetable in process' is more idiomatic.

× My future study plans are having a degree of masters and later on doing the CRNA course which is nurse anesthetist course and it is really necessary for me to reach the epitome of my profession.

✓ My future study plans are to obtain a master's degree and later on do the CRNA course, which is a nurse anesthetist course, and it is really necessary for me to reach the epitome of my profession.

The phrase 'having a degree of masters' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'to obtain a master's degree.' Also, 'doing the CRNA course' is better than 'doing the CRNA course which is nurse anesthetist course' by adding articles and commas for clarity.