School— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp, ngắt câu và dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng. Tránh lặp từ và cung cấp thông tin cụ thể (ví dụ tên khu vực, khoảng cách). Sử dụng liên từ để làm câu mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: I study at a well-known secondary school in my city. It’s located in the city centre, only about a ten-minute walk from my house, which makes it very convenient for me.

Sugestão: Cần nói rõ lí do và dùng từ chính xác. Tránh cấu trúc ngữ pháp sai như 'half many' và 'never pressure student'. Nên dùng một câu chủ đề rồi nêu 1–2 lí do cụ thể với ví dụ.

Exemplo: Yes, I really like my school because it has fair rules that help students behave well. For example, teachers encourage a balanced lifestyle and don’t put too much academic pressure on us.

Sugestão: Cần câu trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (sử dụng thì và số ít/ số nhiều đúng). Hãy cung cấp lý do rõ ràng về phương pháp giảng dạy hoặc chương trình học kèm ví dụ cụ thể.

Exemplo: Yes, I think it’s a good place to study because teachers use interactive methods, like group projects and practical lessons, which help students understand topics better.

Sugestão: Trình bày rõ ràng hơn, dùng cấu trúc câu chính xác và nối ý bằng liên từ. Cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (số lượng cây, hoạt động câu lạc bộ) và sửa lỗi từ vựng/ ngữ pháp.

Exemplo: The school environment is very pleasant; it feels like a park because there are many trees and flowerbeds around the campus. There are also several sports clubs, such as football and badminton, which help students stay healthy.

Sugestão: Cần dùng từ vựng chính xác và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng. Tránh các lỗi như 'can't feel boring' và 'is a motivate'. Nên giải thích tại sao quan trọng và đưa ví dụ cụ thể hoặc hậu quả.

Exemplo: Interest in studying is very important because it motivates students to learn and persist. Without interest, students often lose focus and feel bored, which can lead to poor grades.

× Well I study in well known secondary school in my country is very near by my house and is located in the city center.

✓ Well, I study in a well-known secondary school in my country. It is very near my house and is located in the city center.

Student omitted the indefinite article 'a' before 'well-known secondary school' and used run-on sentence structure. Use 'a' for singular countable nouns. Add hyphen in 'well-known' and split into two sentences for clarity. Also change 'near by' to 'near'.

× Yes I really love my school because I think my school is half many good rules for student and never pressure student about study.

✓ Yes, I really love my school because I think my school has many good rules for students and never pressures students about studying.

Errors: 'half' is incorrect here; 'has' should be used to show possession (verb choice related to subject-verb agreement), 'student' should be plural 'students', and third person singular verb 'pressures' is required. Also use 'studying' (gerund) after 'about'. Remove 'half'.

× A Yes, of course, because this my school and any school is old a good place to study. Even my school my school have a good way to teach student.

✓ Yes, of course, because this school and every school are a good place to study. Also, my school has a good way of teaching students.

Problems: unnecessary 'A' at start, incorrect demonstrative 'this my school' should be 'this school' or 'my school', 'any school is old a good place' is ungrammatical — use 'every school are a good place' but better 'every school is a good place' requires singular agreement with 'every school is a good place to study' OR keep plural 'schools are good places'. I corrected to 'this school and every school are a good place' then adjusted to plural agreement and fixed subject-verb 'have' to 'has' and 'to teach student' to 'of teaching students'.

× The environment in my school is very good. My school like a park because I have many trees in flower.

✓ The environment in my school is very good. My school is like a park because it has many trees and flowers.

Missing verb 'is' after 'My school', wrong pronoun 'I' used where 'it' (school) is needed, and 'in flower' should be 'and flowers'. Use 'has' to indicate possession.

× This makes students feel live in nature.

✓ This makes students feel like they are living in nature.

Original lacked connector and correct verb form. Use 'feel like' + clause or 'feel as if' to express perception. Use progressive 'are living' or 'living' to indicate ongoing feeling.

× Environment in my school have many Sports Club, this helps students improve them health.

✓ The environment at my school has many sports clubs, which help students improve their health.

Missing definite article 'The', preposition 'at' is better than 'in' for environment location, subject-verb agreement: 'environment ... has', 'Sports Club' should be plural and not capitalized, run-on comma splice fixed by using 'which'. 'Them health' wrong pronoun — use 'their health'.

× Interest in study is very important. This is a motivate for student.

✓ Interest in studying is very important. It is a motivation for students.

Use gerund 'studying' after 'interest in', noun 'motivation' instead of incorrect 'motivate', and plural 'students'.

× If not have interest in student study, the student can't feel boring and tired.

✓ If students do not have an interest in studying, they will feel bored and tired.

Incorrect conditional structure: need subject and auxiliary 'do not have'. Use plural 'students' to match general statement and 'will' to show result in future. 'Feel boring' is wrong — use 'feel bored'. 'Study' should be 'studying'.