Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar, and use coherent linking. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and repair markers (e.g., "I love to I often").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me capture memories. For example, when I travel I often take photos of landscapes and sunsets to remember the place and the light.

Sugestão: Fix word choice and grammar, give a clear reason and one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word when adding the reason (e.g., "because" or "as").

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and closer to nature. For example, open fields and forests let me relax and hear birdsong, which I rarely find in the city.

Sugestão: Clarify your main idea and avoid unclear or irrelevant words. State a direct preference and give a clear, specific reason or example. Keep sentences short and logical.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I know the culture and places better. For example, I enjoy visiting local coastal towns where I grew up because they feel familiar and meaningful to me.

× Yes, I love taking picture of different views because it is quite memorable and for example, I love to I often take pictures of landscape and sunsets whenever I'm traveling.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because they are quite memorable. For example, I often take pictures of landscapes and sunsets whenever I'm traveling.

Errors: 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' (singular/plural mismatch) and 'pictures of landscape' should be 'pictures of landscapes' to match count and be idiomatic. Also 'it is quite memorable' refers to 'taking pictures' (plural), so change to 'they are quite memorable' or rephrase. Suggestions: Make nouns agree in number with what they refer to: use plural 'pictures' and plural 'landscapes'; split into two sentences for clarity and remove duplicated phrase 'I love to I often'. Use consistent plural agreement when referring to multiple items.

× I prefer abuse of rural area because it is environment friendly and helps me to be connected in with nature.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are environmentally friendly and help me feel connected to nature.

Errors: 'prefer abuse of rural area' is incorrect—likely intended 'prefer a rural area' or 'prefer rural areas'; 'environment friendly' should be 'environmentally friendly' (adverb form modifying adjective), 'helps me to be connected in with nature' is unidiomatic: use 'help me feel connected to nature'. Preposition corrections: 'connected to' not 'connected in with'. Suggestions: Use 'prefer rural areas' for general preference, use adverb '-ly' for 'environmentally', and use 'connected to' and the verb 'feel' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer using my own country because the e-mail, the immanent rage, just let me. Fascinating.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because the environment, the local culture, and the people feel familiar and fascinating to me.

Errors: The original sentence is unclear and contains fragments and incorrect pronoun and noun usage ('the e-mail, the immanent rage' are nonsense here). Also 'I prefer using my own country' misuses 'using'—prefer 'views in my own country'. Pronoun/word reference is unclear; correct by replacing with coherent nouns that explain preference and use proper pronoun 'me' at end. Suggestions: State specific reasons clearly, use 'views in my own country' instead of 'using my own country', and ensure each noun refers clearly to the idea (environment, culture, people). Keep sentence complete (subject + verb + object).