Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing (e.g. “record the moment what I see and what I have”) and unnecessary repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Taking photos of views helps me relax and preserves memories. For example, when I visit the coast with my family, I take wide shots of the sea and close-ups of interesting buildings so we can look back on the day together.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer followed by specific reasons and an example. Use correct grammar (e.g. ‘urban areas are already urbanized’ is redundant; avoid ‘quite of boring’). Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’ to organize ideas.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because cities offer varied architecture, lively street scenes, and nightlife. For example, I enjoy photographing skyline silhouettes at sunset and busy markets, which provide more dynamic subjects than quiet countryside fields.

Sugestão: Give a polite, specific reason and correct grammar. Avoid negative or blunt words like ‘boring’ without explanation. Limit to one or two supporting sentences and use linking words such as ‘because’ and ‘for example’.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I want to see different cultures and unfamiliar landscapes. For instance, I love photographing historic European streets and Asian temples during trips with friends, which gives me new perspectives and memorable photos.

× Taking pictures of different views can make me feel more relaxed and I can record the moment what I see and what I have.

✓ Taking pictures of different views can make me feel more relaxed, and I can record the moments I see and have.

The phrase 'record the moment what I see and what I have' uses incorrect clause structure. Use the gerund phrase 'record the moments' plus a relative clause or simple object: 'moments I see and have.' Also plural 'moments' fits better. Remove 'what' after 'moment' because it is ungrammatical here; use a reduced relative clause for clarity.

× And I probably will go to view the views with my family and friends because we want to share the views together and record the moment.

✓ I will probably go see the views with my family and friends because we want to share them and record the moments.

Word order and verb choice: 'go to view the views' is awkward; use 'go see the views' or 'visit viewpoints.' 'Probably' fits better before the main verb. Use pronoun 'them' to avoid repeating 'views' and plural 'moments.' Ensure future tense 'will' remains but place adverb before verb for natural English.

× I prefer the views in urban areas because most of the urban areas have urbanization already and the urban views is more interesting and the natural is quite of boring I think.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because most cities are already urbanized, urban views are more interesting, and nature is a bit boring, I think.

Several adjective/adverb issues: 'have urbanization already' is unnatural; use 'are already urbanized.' Subject-verb agreement addressed by changing 'the urban views is' to 'urban views are.' 'The natural is quite of boring' is incorrect; use 'nature is a bit boring.' Also remove redundant 'the' before general nouns like 'views.'

× So I would prefer to watch the urban views.

✓ So I would prefer to look at urban views.

'Watch the urban views' is not the most natural collocation; 'look at' or 'see' is better. Also remove article 'the' when speaking generally. This fixes subtle agreement and collocation issues.

× I've been watching many views in my country already so I think our country is quite so boring.

✓ I've already seen many views in my country, so I think our country is quite boring.

'Been watching many views' is awkward; use 'seen many views.' 'Quite so boring' is redundant and incorrect; use 'quite boring.' Also place 'already' before the main verb for natural emphasis.

× So I would prefer to have many traveling with my friends and my families to watch different views in other countries and it will makes me to have a mem.

✓ So I would prefer to travel a lot with my friends and family to see different views in other countries, and it will create memories for me.

'Have many traveling' is incorrect; use 'travel a lot' or 'do a lot of traveling.' 'Friends and my families' should be 'friends and family' (family as a collective noun). 'It will makes me to have a mem' has multiple errors: 'makes' should be 'make' after 'will,' 'to have a mem' is incomplete—use 'create memories for me.' Also use 'see' instead of 'watch' for views.