Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: remove filler words (uh, umm), correct articles and verb forms, and use one or two supporting details. Begin with a clear topic sentence and follow with a specific example or reason using a linking word.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, I often revisit beach photos from past holidays, and looking at them makes me feel calm and nostalgic.

Sugestão: Provide a clearer topic sentence and a specific, developed reason with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague phrasing like "more prominent" without explanation; describe what you mean (less light pollution, open horizons).

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because the open landscapes and low light pollution make sunsets more vivid. For instance, I can see the full horizon and brighter colours in the countryside, which is much less possible in a crowded city.

Sugestão: Clarify your idea and correct mistakes: remove contradictory phrases, fix grammar, and avoid incorrect words ("abuse" is wrong). State a clear reason and give a specific example of what you want to see abroad (different landscapes, architecture, cultures).

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new landscapes and architectural styles. For example, I would love to photograph the colourful markets in Morocco and the mountain scenery in Switzerland, which are very different from what I see at home.

× Yes, I do like taking a pictures of uh, different views.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views.

The plural noun 'pictures' should not be preceded by the indefinite article 'a'. Use either 'a picture' (singular) or 'pictures' (plural) without 'a'. Remove 'a' to correct the article usage. Suggestion: Use 'a picture' for one image or 'pictures' when referring to multiple images.

× I kept on umm, going back to that pictures.

✓ I keep going back to those pictures.

The original mixes past tense 'kept' with present meaning of a habitual action. Also 'that pictures' incorrectly combines singular demonstrative with plural noun. Use present simple 'keep' for habitual action and plural demonstrative 'those'. Suggestion: Use present simple for repeated/habitual actions and match demonstratives to number.

× It makes me calm and at peace, yes.

✓ It makes me feel calm and at peace.

The verb 'makes' typically takes an object plus an adjective or a verb phrase 'feel + adjective'. Adding 'feel' clarifies the state. Without 'feel' the sentence is less natural in English. Suggestion: Use 'make someone feel + adjective' to describe emotions or states.

× I prefer views in rural areas because, for example, the sunsets, it's more prominent in the rural areas than in urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because, for example, sunsets are more prominent in rural areas than in urban areas.

Errors: unnecessary comma and 'the' before 'sunsets' and 'rural areas' makes the sentence awkward. Also 'it's more prominent' is singular while referring to 'sunsets' plural. Use plural verb 'are' and omit unnecessary definite articles for general statements. Suggestion: For general statements about plural nouns, omit 'the' and use plural verbs (sunsets are). Avoid redundant articles before geographic area types.

× I prefer views in other countries because I have been, I haven't been there so I like taking photos or I like seeing new abuse aside from my own country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I haven't been there, so I like taking photos and seeing new places outside my own country.

Multiple issues: contradictory phrases 'I have been, I haven't been there' need resolution; 'abuse' is incorrect word choice for 'places'; 'aside from my own country' is awkward. Use 'haven't been' to explain unfamiliarity, and 'places' instead of 'abuse'. Use 'and' to connect 'taking photos' and 'seeing'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (present perfect to indicate experience), choose correct vocabulary ('places' not 'abuse'), and use clear connectors like 'so' or 'and' for coordination.