Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, reduce redundancy and hesitations, and organize into 2–3 clear sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Remove filler words like “uh” and avoid repeating ideas (e.g., sharing on social media and places).

Exemplo: Yes — I love taking photos of different views. Photographs help me remember special moments from my travels, and I find landscape photography relaxing because it lets me focus on composition and light.

Sugestão: Correct grammatical errors and clarify contrasts with linking words. Give one clear reason for each preference and use specific examples (e.g., busy streets, historic buildings, or mountain views). Avoid contradictory phrases in the same sentence and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: It depends on my mood. If I want excitement I prefer urban views like bustling streets and historic architecture, but when I need to relax I choose rural scenery such as rolling hills or quiet lakes.

Sugestão: The student’s transcript for this question is missing a clear original answer; instead examiner-style feedback appears. Provide a concise direct reply with one topic sentence and one supporting reason for preferring either local or foreign views, or both, and include a short example. Use linking words to contrast the two choices and correct grammar (e.g., “each place,” “often”).

Exemplo: I enjoy both local and foreign views. At home I appreciate familiar landscapes and cultural scenes, but when I travel abroad I love discovering new architecture and natural sights that broaden my perspective.

× I love capturing beautiful scenery whenever I travel. Taking photos helps me remember special moments and places, and I really enjoy sharing my pictures on social media and places.

✓ I love capturing beautiful scenery whenever I travel. Taking photos helps me remember special moments and places, and I really enjoy sharing my pictures on social media.

The phrase 'on social media and places' incorrectly uses 'places' after 'and', which is redundant and ungrammatical. Remove 'and places' to make the sentence concise and correct. If the intention was to include another location, specify it with an appropriate preposition (e.g., 'on social media and in photo albums'). Suggestion: omit redundant word or replace with a clear prepositional phrase.

× And I really, uh, photography is a relaxing hobby for me.

✓ Photography is a relaxing hobby for me.

This sentence mixes interjection 'uh' and an unnecessary conjunction 'And' with a noun phrase, creating a fragment and awkward structure. Remove filler words and the leading conjunction to form a complete, clear sentence. If a filler is desired in speech, place it appropriately: 'And, uh, I find photography a relaxing hobby.' Suggestion: avoid filler in formal answers or restructure to 'I find photography a relaxing hobby.'

× Honestly it depends on how I'm feeling. Sometimes I really enjoy the assignment and energy upset the views, but all the times I just want to the calm and peacefulness of the countryside.

✓ Honestly, it depends on how I'm feeling. Sometimes I really enjoy the vibrancy and energy of city views, but often I just want the calm and peacefulness of the countryside.

Multiple sentence structure and word choice errors: missing comma after 'Honestly'; 'assignment and energy upset the views' is ungrammatical and likely wrong word choices ('vibrancy and energy' fits); 'all the times' is incorrect—use 'often' or 'many times'; 'I just want to the calm' has an extra 'the' before 'calm'. Correcting these yields a coherent contrast between urban and rural preferences. Suggestion: use clear nouns and adverbs ('vibrancy', 'often') and ensure determiners (remove extra 'the').

× I think both have their own unique beauty.

✓ I think both have their own unique beauty.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no article correction is needed. It is included here to confirm correctness rather than change. Suggestion: no change required.

× Good job!

✓ Good job!

This is a feedback remark from the examiner, not the student. It is grammatically correct and requires no change. Suggestion: no change required.

× Each places

✓ Each place

'Each' requires a singular noun, so 'places' (plural) is incorrect. Use 'place' after 'each' or use 'every place'. Suggestion: use 'each' + singular noun or 'every' + singular noun.

× all the times

✓ often

The phrase 'all the times' is nonstandard; the appropriate adverb to express frequency is 'often' or 'many times'. Suggestion: replace with 'often' for natural English.