Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity, reduce redundancy, and use more precise vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g., 'I also enjoy'), and fix word choice errors ('lighting' not 'lightening', 'composition' or 'shots' instead of 'conversations'). Include one specific example and link ideas with a cohesive connector.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because photos help me remember special moments. I also like experimenting with angles and lighting to make my shots more interesting. For example, I often shoot city streets from a low angle to emphasize the buildings, and I prefer the warm glow of golden hour at the beach.

Sugestão: Make the topic sentence more natural and correct grammar and word choice. Use specific details and linking words to explain why city views appeal to you. Avoid vague phrases ('something like Cities Skylight') and ensure subject-verb agreement ('make me feel excited').

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because city skylines at night are stunning. The twinkling lights and unique architecture create a vibrant atmosphere, and I enjoy photographing the contrast between old and modern buildings.

Sugestão: Clarify and expand briefly with a concrete reason and example. Avoid absolute words like 'always' and add a linking word to connect ideas. Provide a short personal example of a foreign view that impressed you to make the answer more specific.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer different scenery and cultures that feel more exotic. For instance, when I visited Japan, the contrast between modern cities and tranquil temples gave me a fresh perspective and inspired many memorable photographs.

× Also enjoy experimenting with different angles or lightening to create more interesting conversations.

✓ I also enjoy experimenting with different angles or lighting to create more interesting compositions.

Missing subject and incorrect word choice: the student omitted the subject 'I' which makes the clause incomplete (sentence structure error). 'Lightening' is the wrong word; the intended noun is 'lighting'. 'Conversations' is contextually incorrect for photography; 'compositions' or 'shots' fits better. Add 'I' to make a complete sentence and use the gerund 'experimenting' correctly with proper objects. Suggested improvement: Always include the subject in independent clauses and choose photography-related nouns like 'lighting' and 'compositions'.

× For example, train low angle shows of city streets or golden hour light at the beach.

✓ For example, I try low-angle shots of city streets or capture the golden-hour light at the beach.

Sentence fragments and wrong word forms: the original is a fragment lacking a main verb and contains incorrect word choices ('train' instead of 'try' or 'take', 'shows' instead of 'shots'). The corrected sentence supplies a subject and appropriate verbs and noun forms. Suggested improvement: Ensure each sentence has a subject and verb and use correct collocations like 'take shots' or 'try low-angle shots' and 'golden-hour light'.

× I definitely prefer views in urban areas because there is something like Cities Skylight at night with all the lights and some interesting architecture that make me feel exciting.

✓ I definitely prefer views in urban areas because there is something like a city's skyline at night with all the lights and some interesting architecture that makes me feel excited.

Multiple issues: 'Cities Skylight' is incorrect—use 'a city's skyline' (singular possessive) or 'a city skyline' (article error). 'Architecture that make' has subject-verb agreement error; 'architecture' is singular so verb should be 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). 'Feel exciting' is incorrect use of adjective; people feel 'excited', not 'exciting'. Suggested improvement: Use correct articles and possessive forms ('a city's skyline' or 'a city skyline'), ensure verb agrees with singular nouns, and use 'excited' to describe a person's feeling.

× I prefer views in other countries because foreign landscapes are always more exotic and exciting.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because foreign landscapes are often more exotic and exciting.

Minor word choice: 'always' is too strong and may be inaccurate; 'often' is more appropriate. No grammatical error per se, but changing 'always' improves accuracy. Keep plural agreement 'landscapes...are' is correct. Suggested improvement: Use quantifiers that reflect likelihood ('often' instead of 'always') unless you mean without exception.

× Also, visiting abroad usually gives me a fresh perspective on life.

✓ Also, visiting other countries usually gives me a fresh perspective on life.

Style and clarity: 'visiting abroad' is understandable but less natural than 'visiting other countries' in this context; present tense 'gives' is correct. This suggestion refines phrasing rather than fixing a strict grammatical error. Suggested improvement: Prefer clearer collocations like 'visiting other countries' for natural speech.