Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words (for example, 'for instance' or 'also') and correct basic grammar (e.g., 'kinds', 'grasses' -> 'grass', avoid trailing 'and').

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because I like capturing variety. For instance, when I visited Japan I took photos in a large park with rivers and grass, which was perfect for picnic scenes; I also photographed beaches where the light was great for sunrise shots.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer first and support it with specific reasons. Avoid unclear phrases ('scout the Wellness of the cities') and repetition. Use linking words ('because', 'for example') and correct collocations ('go hiking', 'rural areas'). Keep to 2–3 supporting sentences max.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they offer natural landscapes and quiet spaces. For example, I enjoy scenes with trees, hills and mountains where I can go hiking and photograph trails and panoramic vistas.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give one clear, specific comparison. Fix grammar and coherence: avoid unclear phrases ('blocks the feasibility of the fuel'). Use linking words ('because', 'compared to'). Provide one concrete example and a concise explanation of why you prefer other countries.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because the scenery and air quality are often better. For example, when I visited Miami Beach I enjoyed clear skies and clean air, whereas in Hong Kong air pollution can make distant views hazy and less pleasant for photography.

× I would like to take pictures in all different kind of fields and I took pictures in Japan before.

✓ I would like to take pictures in all different kinds of fields, and I took pictures in Japan before.

The noun 'kind' must agree in number with 'all different'; use plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to join two independent clauses.

× It was a very huge park with rivers and grasses that I think is perfect to go picnic and I took pictures in beaches and and.

✓ It was a very large park with rivers and grass that I think is perfect for picnics, and I also took pictures on beaches.

Several issues: 'very huge' is redundant and non-idiomatic; use 'very large' or just 'huge'. 'Grasses' is usually 'grass' for general areas. The clause 'that I think is perfect to go picnic' is ungrammatical; use 'perfect for picnics' or 'perfect for having a picnic'. Use 'on beaches' (preposition) rather than 'in beaches'. Remove repeated 'and' and add 'also' for clarity.

× I prefer views in in rural areas where I could easily scout the the Wellness of the cities.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas where I can easily scout the wellness of the cities.

Remove the repeated word 'in'. Use 'can' instead of 'could' to match the present preference. 'Scout the Wellness of the cities' is awkwardly capitalized and unclear; make 'wellness' lowercase. Consider a more natural phrase like 'assess the livability of nearby cities' if that is the intended meaning.

× Like there's trees in the park and there's mountains where I can hike, go hiking and so much more. So I.

✓ For example, there are trees in the park and mountains where I can go hiking and do many other activities.

Use 'there are' for plural nouns ('trees', 'mountains') rather than 'there's' which contracts 'there is'. Avoid repeating verbs ('hike, go hiking'). Complete the sentence; 'So I.' is a fragment and must be finished or removed.

× I prefer fields in other countries because I've once visited Miami in the US and I visit the Miami Beach and it was beautiful because the compared to Hong Kong, the air pollution in Hong Kong is quite severe and it blocks the feasibility of the fuel so at other countries.

✓ I prefer fields in other countries because I once visited Miami in the US and visited Miami Beach; it was beautiful. Compared to Hong Kong, the air pollution in Hong Kong is quite severe and it reduces visibility, so other countries feel cleaner.

Multiple tense and word-choice problems: 'I've once visited' is awkward; 'I once visited' is simpler. Use consistent past tense 'visited Miami Beach'. 'because the compared to Hong Kong' is ungrammatical; separate sentences and start 'Compared to Hong Kong,'. 'blocks the feasibility of the fuel' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'reduces visibility' or 'affects air quality'. Rephrase to convey the intended meaning clearly.