Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “take pictures,” “unusual places,” “to make memories”).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I visit a tourist site or a new city, I usually photograph landmarks and landscapes so I can remember the trip later.

Sugestão: Give a direct preference statement and follow with one clear reason using linking words. Remove hesitations and unclear words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “rural areas,” “urban areas,” “peaceful atmosphere”).

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because they have a peaceful atmosphere and open spaces. For instance, I enjoy walking in the countryside where there is less noise and more natural scenery.

Sugestão: State your preference clearly, then explain with one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases. Use correct expressions like “buildings” or “architecture,” and link ideas with words such as “because” or “for example.”

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because their architecture and cityscapes often feel more diverse and striking. For example, historic European streets or modern Asian skylines impress me and make my visits more memorable.

× Yes, I definitely like to take a picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I definitely like taking pictures of different views.

The verb phrase 'like to take' is acceptable, but the student used singular 'a picture' and inconsistent verb form with 'different views'. Use the present participle 'taking' and plural 'pictures' to match 'different views' and create natural English: 'like taking pictures of different views.' Suggestion: use 'like' + verb-ing for general preferences and plural for multiple items.

× When I go to unusual place such as such as TRA tourist place or a new place, I really like to take a picture to to make a memory for the future.

✓ When I go to an unusual place, such as a tourist attraction or a new area, I really like to take pictures to create memories for the future.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'unusual place' (use 'an'), duplicated phrase 'such as such as', unclear 'TRA tourist place' likely meant 'tourist attraction', double 'to to', singular 'a picture' vs plural 'pictures', and unnatural 'make a memory for the future' (use 'create memories for the future'). These are sentence structure and article errors; fix by adding 'an', removing duplication, using correct noun 'tourist attraction', removing extra 'to', and using plural 'pictures' and 'create memories.'

× Umm, I, I prefer dollar area and urban area.

✓ Umm, I prefer rural areas to urban areas.

The student said 'dollar area' which is incorrect; likely intended 'rural area'. Also pronoun/word choice and number: use plural 'areas' when speaking generally and the comparative 'prefer X to Y'. Suggestion: 'I prefer rural areas to urban areas.'

× Uh yeah. Umm, some people feel that uh, we the peaceful and the not precious mood in rural area also, I totally agree with that opinion, uh.

✓ Some people feel that there is a peaceful and unpressured mood in rural areas, and I totally agree with that opinion.

Issues: missing 'there is' (There be issue), incorrect adjective 'not precious' (wrong word choice), 'we' is wrong pronoun, singular 'rural area' should be plural. Correct by using 'there is' to introduce existence, 'peaceful and unpressured' or 'less stressful' to convey intended meaning, and plural 'rural areas.' This addresses incorrect adjectives/adverbs and sentence structure.

× I, I prefer the other country build more than my country build.

✓ I prefer buildings in other countries more than those in my country.

Problems: 'the other country build' is ungrammatical—'build' is a verb, and 'the other country' is vague. Use plural noun 'buildings' and compare with 'those in my country.' This fixes incorrect pronoun/reference and word form.

× Umm, personally, I regard uh, that my Co, uh, that my contribute is also paid for, such as the traditional, uh, traditional scenery.

✓ Personally, I feel that my country has its own contribution, such as traditional scenery.

Confusing fragments: 'I regard that my Co... that my contribute is also paid for' is ungrammatical. Replace with clear structure 'I feel that my country has its own contributions, such as traditional scenery.' Use 'contributions' (noun) and 'my country' instead of unclear fragments.

× Uh, However, in other country, uh, makes me a deeply in impression of that moment and they, they.

✓ However, scenery in other countries leaves a deeper impression on me at that moment.

Problems: missing subject ('in other country' should be 'the scenery in other countries' or 'places in other countries'), incorrect verb 'makes me a deeply in impression', and trailing 'they, they.' Correct by using 'leaves a deeper impression on me' and plural 'other countries.' Suggestion: use clear subject + verb and correct collocation 'leave an impression on someone.'