Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and eliminate fillers (uh, um). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences and correct awkward phrasing (e.g. “almost make there” unclear).

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, when I visit scenic places like coastal cliffs or mountain overlooks, I take photos to remember the colours and the mood. Because photos capture small details I might forget, I often review them later to relive those moments.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer first, then add one specific reason and one concrete example. Remove hesitation words and correct grammar (e.g. “which were there in a country” → “which is in the countryside”). Use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they tend to be quieter and more natural. For example, when I visit my grandmother in the countryside I enjoy wide fields and clean air, which help me relax. Therefore I usually choose rural scenery for photography.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly: state preference then explain with a specific reason and example. Remove hesitations and refine sentences (e.g. “never visited any country yet” → “haven’t travelled abroad yet”). Keep within five sentences and use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country at the moment because I haven’t travelled abroad yet and there is so much variety here. For example, last month I went to Shimla, a hill station, and photographed its scenic pine-covered slopes and peaceful valleys, which I found very beautiful.

× clicking pictures of those places really helped me to preserve the moments or the memories that I uh, almost make there while uh, being at the.

✓ clicking pictures of those places really helps me preserve the moments or the memories that I almost make while being there.

The original sentence mixes tenses and misuses verb forms. 'Clicking pictures ... really helped me' mixes present participle with past simple; keep present tense 'helps' to match habitual action. 'to preserve the moments or the memories that I almost make there while being at the' is ungrammatical: use 'preserve the moments or memories I create while being there.' I simplified to 'preserve the moments or the memories that I almost make while being there' and changed 'helped' to 'helps' to reflect habitual action. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense (present simple) for habits and use 'create/make' plus 'while being there' rather than dangling 'being at the.'

× Well, what are good to absorb, But if I have to choose one, I would say the rural areas are more attractive and peaceful.

✓ Well, both are good to soak in, but if I have to choose one, I would say rural areas are more attractive and peaceful.

The original sentence uses 'what are good to absorb' which is incorrect pronoun and verb choice. 'Both' is the correct pronoun to refer to urban and rural views. 'Absorb' is awkward; 'soak in' or 'take in' is better. Also capitalization: 'But' after comma should be lowercase. Suggestion: use 'both' when comparing two items and a natural verb like 'soak in.'

× Uh, if I, whenever I go there, I just, uh, love the view that I find there, especially in peaceful areas.

✓ Whenever I go there, I just love the views I find, especially in peaceful areas.

Redundant fillers and commas interrupt the sentence. Use 'Whenever I go there' as a time clause followed by present simple 'I just love' for habitual action. 'the view that I find there' is better as plural 'the views I find' for natural speech. Keep verb forms simple and consistent.

× For example, I visited my grandmother's house, which were there in a country.

✓ For example, I visited my grandmother's house, which was in the countryside.

'which were there in a country' is incorrect: 'house' is singular so the relative clause needs singular verb 'was.' 'in a country' is awkward; use 'in the countryside' to mean a rural area. Ensure subject-verb agreement and choose the correct noun phrase.

× To be honest, I have never visited any country uh, yet, but, uh, definitely I'm in love with my country and I really, uh, love the views that I uh, come across in my life.

✓ To be honest, I have never visited any other country yet, but I am definitely in love with my country and I really love the views I come across in my life.

Add 'other' to clarify contrast with 'my country.' Use present perfect 'have never visited' correctly, and remove filler 'uh' and extraneous commas. Use 'I am' instead of contraction 'I'm' optionally; keep present simple 'love' and present simple 'come across' for habitual actions.

× For example, last month I went to Shimla, which is a hill station and I really captured scenic and peaceful view there.

✓ For example, last month I went to Shimla, which is a hill station, and I captured a scenic and peaceful view there.

Missing article before 'scenic and peaceful view' — use 'a scenic and peaceful view.' Also add comma before conjunction linking clauses. 'Really' is unnecessary; removed or could be kept for emphasis. Ensure adjectives are used with correct articles.