Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct simple grammar (e.g., 'it reminds me of my travels'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Taking photos helps me remember my travels; for example, a picture I took in Kyoto brings back the sights and smells of that trip. Because of that, I often take photos to preserve memories.

Sugestão: Clarify the main idea and fix word choice (use 'views' not 'beers'). Begin with a topic sentence stating your preference, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repeating the same phrase.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more peaceful. For example, when I visited the countryside near Kyoto, the quiet temples and bamboo groves helped me relax and recharge.

Sugestão: State your preference clearly and give one specific reason. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'vibe' or 'atmosphere') and complete your sentences. Add a brief example and avoid trailing off.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I enjoy the traditional Japanese atmosphere. For example, in Kyoto I was impressed by the wooden temples and narrow streets, which felt familiar and comforting to me.

× Yes, I like because it reminds me of every travel.

✓ Yes, I like it because it reminds me of every trip.

Missing object pronoun and incorrect noun choice: 'like' needs an object ('it') to show what you like. 'Travel' as an uncountable noun is fine, but here 'trip' is more natural when referring to individual journeys. Suggestion: add 'it' after 'like' and use 'trip' for individual travels.

× For example when I took a picture of Kyoto, I can remind I can remember the memories and also I.

✓ For example, when I took a picture in Kyoto, it helps me remember the memories.

Multiple issues: word order and redundant phrases. 'Can remind I can remember' is ungrammatical. Use 'it helps me remember' or 'it reminds me of' plus correct preposition 'in Kyoto'. Remove the stray 'and also I'. Suggestion: use clear subject 'it' (referring to the picture) and verb 'helps me remember' or 'reminds me of'.

× I prefer beers in rural area because I like quiet place and I feel relaxed when I visit rural area.

✓ I prefer areas in the countryside because I like quiet places and I feel relaxed when I visit rural areas.

Word choice and plurality: 'beers' is incorrect in this context; likely meant 'areas' or 'the countryside'. 'Rural area' should be plural or preceded by an article. 'Quiet place' should be plural 'quiet places' to match general preference. Suggestion: use 'areas in the countryside' or 'rural areas' and make nouns plural for general statements.

× When I visit Kyoto in rural area, I felt very relaxed.

✓ When I visited Kyoto in the countryside, I felt very relaxed.

Tense and article: the first clause uses present tense 'visit' while the second uses past 'felt'; keep consistent past tense for a past experience. Use 'visited' and correct noun phrase 'the countryside' or 'a rural area'. Suggestion: use 'When I visited...' to match 'felt'.

× I prefer beers in my country because I like Japanese vibes.

✓ I prefer places in my country because I like the Japanese atmosphere.

'Beers' is incorrect again; context requires 'places' or 'views'. 'Japanese vibes' is informal; 'Japanese atmosphere' or 'Japanese vibe' (singular) is clearer. Also include article 'the' before 'Japanese atmosphere'. Suggestion: replace 'beers' with 'places' or 'views' and use a more appropriate noun phrase.

× For example, when I visited Kyoto I saw a lot of temples of Japanese styles and I felt I was very impressed and.

✓ For example, when I visited Kyoto, I saw a lot of temples in Japanese style and I felt very impressed.

Grammar and word order: 'temples of Japanese styles' is awkward; use 'temples in Japanese style' or 'Japanese-style temples'. Remove extra words 'I was' and the trailing 'and'. Keep past tense 'visited', 'saw', 'felt'. Suggestion: use 'Japanese-style temples' and concise phrasing 'I felt very impressed'.

× Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?

✓ Do you prefer views in urban areas or in rural areas?

Parallel prepositional structure: include 'in' before both alternatives for clarity and parallelism. Though both versions can be understood, repeating 'in' makes the sentence grammatically balanced. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure when offering choices.

× Yes, I like because it reminds me of every travel.

✓ Yes, I like it because it reminds me of every trip.

Redundant entry: same sentence as first; 'there be' not applicable but included to ensure correction. Ensure addition of object pronoun 'it' and use 'trip'.