Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more fluent: use accurate words (e.g., "views" not "weave"), avoid filler words (uh, um), and finish your ideas. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two concise reasons with specific details. Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences and connect reasons with simple linking phrases (for example, "First," "Second," or "Also").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. First, photographs help me remember beautiful moments and historic places I visit, such as old temples and city skylines. Second, it is a relaxing hobby that helps me notice small details like light and color. For example, I once captured a sunrise over a river that reminded me of a peaceful family trip.

Sugestão: Resolve the contradiction and give specific reasons. You said you prefer urban areas but then listed rural scenery — clarify which you mean. Remove hesitations and structure with a clear topic sentence, then two supporting details with linking words ("because," "for example"). Be specific about what you like in the chosen area.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I love natural scenery. For example, I enjoy photographing mountains, rivers and the sunrise because they offer peaceful atmospheres and dramatic colors. Also, rural areas often provide quieter, less crowded spots where I can take time to compose my shots.

Sugestão: Make your position clear and avoid vague phrases. State directly that you like both, then give balanced, specific reasons for each. Use linking words like "because" and "also" to connect ideas, and finish each reason with an example. Eliminate fillers and repeat words.

Exemplo: I like both views in my own country and those abroad. At home, visiting familiar places gives me a sense of cultural connection and pride, for example when I photograph traditional festivals. Also, traveling overseas lets me explore new architectures and landscapes, such as colorful markets or coastal towns, which inspires different photographic ideas.

× I love taking, uh, pictures of different weave.

✓ I love taking, uh, pictures of different views.

The student used 'weave' which is a different noun and not plural 'views'. This is a vocabulary error but it functions like a singular/plural error because the intended noun is 'view' plural 'views'. Replace with 'views' to match context and plurality. Suggestion: Check vocabulary and ensure the plural form 'views' is used when referring to multiple scenes.

× Uh, one reason is that, that it reminds me the beautiful moments and, and the, uh, memorable and historical places I visit.

✓ One reason is that it reminds me of the beautiful moments and the memorable and historical places I visit.

Missing preposition 'of' after 'reminds me' and extra commas and duplicated 'that' make the sentence awkward. Remove the duplicate 'that' and add 'of' to complete the verb phrase 'reminds me of'. Also remove unnecessary commas and filler words. Suggestion: Use 'reminds me of' + object; avoid repeated fillers and duplicate words.

× And the other reason is that, that it's a refreshing hobby for me and it gives.

✓ The other reason is that it's a refreshing hobby for me and it gives me joy.

The sentence is incomplete ('it gives' needs an object) and contains a duplicated 'that'. Provide a noun phrase like 'me joy' or 'me relaxation' to complete the idea. Remove the extra 'that'. Suggestion: Complete the clause by specifying what 'it gives' and eliminate repeated words.

× Uh, to be honest, I prefer uh, views in the urban areas.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in urban areas.

Using 'the' before 'urban areas' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Remove the definite article for a general preference. Also remove extra fillers for clarity. Suggestion: Use zero article for general plural nouns: 'in urban areas'.

× One reason is there that I love natural sceneries and the beautiful mountains, greenery, the flowing of rivers, the sunrise and sunset these.

✓ One reason is that I love natural scenery: the beautiful mountains, greenery, flowing rivers, and the sunrise and sunset.

Problems: misplaced 'there', plural 'sceneries' is nonstandard (use 'scenery'), awkward word order, and 'these' at the end is extraneous. Reorder and use singular collective noun 'scenery'. Suggestion: Use 'scenery' for uncountable collective landscapes and place examples after a colon or 'such as'.

× I prefer both on, uh, movies in my country or other countries.

✓ I prefer both visiting places in my country and in other countries.

The original sentence misuses 'on' and 'movies' likely confused with 'moving' or 'places'. It lacks correct prepositions and structure for 'both...and'. Replace with 'visiting places in my country and in other countries' to match the question about views. Suggestion: Use parallel structure 'both A and B' and correct verb/noun choice ('visiting places').

× The reason for traveling in my country is give me a sense of connectedness to my culture and it gives me a sense of pride and umm, the other reason for traveling outside that I love experimenting new things new.

✓ Traveling in my country gives me a sense of connectedness to my culture and a sense of pride, and traveling abroad lets me try new things.

Multiple errors: incorrect verb form 'is give' should be 'gives', redundant phrasing 'it gives me a sense of' can be tightened, and the second clause is ungrammatical ('the other reason for traveling outside that I love experimenting new things new'). Rephrase with parallel structure and correct verb agreement: 'Traveling in my country gives...' and 'traveling abroad lets me try new things.' Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement ('traveling... gives'), use parallel clauses for 'and', and use concise verbs like 'lets me try' or 'allows me to try'.