Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and reduce hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds like "umm" and complete sentences without repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph dramatic sunsets and remote coastlines because the changing light creates striking colours; additionally, places with abundant wildlife allow me to capture spontaneous moments that make each photo unique.

Sugestão: Make a single clear statement and support it with a concise reason and one specific example. Remove repeated phrases and hesitation. Use a linking word such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer more wildlife and natural scenery. For instance, I like photographing wetlands where birds gather at dawn, so I can capture lively, natural behaviour.

Sugestão: Avoid vague phrasing and hesitations; give a direct answer then explain with specific comparisons. Use linking words like "however" or "on the other hand" to contrast domestic and foreign views, and provide a short concrete example for each.

Exemplo: I like both, depending on the kind of scenes I want. For example, I enjoy exploring foreign mountains and deserts to see unfamiliar landscapes, whereas at home on my island I photograph coastal cliffs and tropical sunsets that are unique and easy to access.

× I love photographing different views, especially breathtaking sunset and dramatic landscapes.

✓ I love photographing different views, especially breathtaking sunsets and dramatic landscapes.

The noun 'sunset' should be plural when referring to sunsets in general alongside 'landscapes'. This is an adjective/noun usage issue: use the plural form 'sunsets' to match the general, countable sense. Suggestion: use plural for countable nouns when speaking generally (breathtaking sunsets).

× Umm I am particularly drawn to places with abundant wildlife because they offer unique and spontaneous.

✓ Umm I am particularly drawn to places with abundant wildlife because they offer unique and spontaneous experiences.

The sentence ends with 'unique and spontaneous' which are adjectives and require a noun to modify. This is an adjective usage issue: add the noun 'experiences' (or 'moments') to complete the idea. Suggestion: follow adjectives with the noun they describe (unique and spontaneous experiences).

× I'd say I prefer views in rural areas because of the wildlife. Umm also I am particularly drowned to places and with a lot of wildlife and I prefer definitely.

✓ I'd say I prefer views in rural areas because of the wildlife. Umm also I am particularly drawn to places with a lot of wildlife and I definitely prefer them.

Several adjective/word-choice errors: 'drowned' is incorrect; correct word is the adjective/past-participial 'drawn' (to be attracted). Also 'and with a lot of wildlife' is ungrammatical; remove 'and' or restructure. The final fragment 'I prefer definitely' has adverb placement issues—'definitely' should come before the verb or before the object: 'I definitely prefer them.' Suggestions: use 'drawn' (not 'drowned'), place modifiers next to the verb they modify, and use clear object references ('them').

× Actually both. It really depends because I really appreciate traveling to broaden my horizons and discover new umm, scenery, but also uh, as I live on an island, I also, umm, enjoy uh, dazzling umm.

✓ Actually both. It really depends because I really appreciate traveling to broaden my horizons and discover new scenery, but also, as I live on an island, I also enjoy dazzling coastal views.

The original has incomplete nouns and unclear pronoun/nominal references. 'Discover new scenery' is correct (no comma before 'scenery'), and the final phrase is unfinished ('enjoy dazzling umm'). This is a pronoun/word-choice and sentence-completion issue: supply the noun 'coastal views' (or 'seascapes') to complete the thought. Suggestion: replace filler sounds with the intended noun and ensure each clause has a clear object (discover new scenery; enjoy dazzling coastal views).