Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Good direct response and relevant examples. To improve, make the answer slightly more concise, avoid repetition, and add a linking phrase to connect the general statement to the example. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., use “capture” or “scenes”) and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories of the places I visit. For example, I often capture sunsets and bustling local markets to remember the atmosphere and vibrant colors. These photos also help me share my experiences with friends and family.

Sugestão: The answer is clear but contains repetition, short fragmented sentences, and limited vocabulary. To improve, use a clear topic sentence, combine details with linking words, correct grammar (singular/plural, avoid filler words), and provide one supporting reason with a brief example. Keep it within 3–4 well-formed sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because they feel more natural and relaxing. For example, I can see mountains, rivers and green fields, which create a peaceful atmosphere. Consequently, I find rural scenery more restorative than busy urban views.

Sugestão: The response is unclear and contains many errors (word choice, repetition, sentence fragments). To improve, start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, give specific reasons with correct comparative forms, and finish with a concise concluding remark. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “however”) correctly and avoid unfinished sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they often have greener, less developed landscapes than those at home. For example, I find countryside in some countries has more forests and unspoiled scenery, which I enjoy exploring. However, there are also beautiful places in my country, so both can be appealing.

× I like to take photos of different fields when I travel because they help me preserve memories of the places I visited.

✓ I like to take photos of different places when I travel because they help me preserve memories of the places I visit.

The student used 'fields' which may be grammatical but conflicts with later 'places I visited.' 'Places' is a better plural noun to match context. Also 'visited' (past) conflicts with habitual action 'when I travel'; change to present 'visit' to express general habit. Suggestion: use 'places' and present tense 'visit' for habitual actions.

× For example, I often photograph sunsets and local markets to remember the atmosphere and colors.

✓ For example, I often photograph sunsets and local markets to remember the atmosphere and colors.

This sentence is grammatically correct; present simple 'often photograph' is appropriate for habitual action. No change needed.

× I prefer rural areas because it's more natural and relaxing.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they're more natural and relaxing.

The pronoun 'it' refers to plural 'rural areas', so subject-verb agreement requires plural 'they're' instead of singular 'it's'. Suggestion: match pronoun number to the noun (areas -> they).

× For example I can see mountains, river, green fields.

✓ For example, I can see mountains, rivers, and green fields.

List items must be parallel and use correct plural forms. 'River' should be plural 'rivers' to match 'mountains' and 'green fields'. Add commas and 'and' for proper list structure.

× It's it's a good scenery to see, very beautiful.

✓ It's a beautiful scene to see.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun; using 'a scenery' is incorrect. Also duplicate 'It's it's' is an error. Use 'a beautiful scene' or simply 'the scenery is beautiful.' Keep adjectives in correct order and avoid redundancy.

× I prefer fuse in other countries because it's more natural, more more green and the scenery is very beautiful than my country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because they are more natural, greener, and the scenery is more beautiful than in my country.

Multiple issues: 'fuse' is a typo for 'views'; 'it's' refers to singular but 'views' is plural so use 'they are'; 'more more green' is repetition and comparative should be 'greener'; comparison with country needs 'more beautiful than in my country' to include preposition 'in'. Suggestion: fix typo, match pronouns' number, use comparative forms (greener, more beautiful), and include 'in' before 'my country'.

× However, it's almost the same if.

✓ However, it's almost the same there.

The fragment 'if' at the end is incomplete and incorrect. The intended idea is likely that the views are almost the same there, so replace 'if' with 'there' to complete the sentence. Also ensure 'it' correctly refers to 'the scenery' or 'the views' (better: 'they are almost the same').