Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct word choice, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Aim for 2–4 sentences and replace hesitations (‘uh’, ‘umm’) with brief pauses. Also correct phrases such as “memorizing moments” → “memorable moments” and “saving my phones” → “saving on my phone”.

Exemplo: Yes. I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me preserve memorable moments and shows the atmosphere of a place. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes and then share the best shots with friends on social media.

Sugestão: Give a direct, structured answer with specific contrasts and linking words. Avoid hesitations and unclear word choices (e.g. “grow some syringe” is incorrect). State your preference or say you have no fixed preference, then give 1–2 clear reasons and a brief example. Use linking words like “however” or “on the other hand.”

Exemplo: It depends on my mood. On one hand, I like urban views for their energy and interesting architecture; on the other hand, I enjoy rural views for their peace and natural beauty. For instance, I take city photos when I visit downtown, but I prefer countryside views when I go hiking.

Sugestão: Answer directly and fluently: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and an example. Remove hesitations and avoid vague phrases like “each everyone.” Explain what makes domestic views appealing (culture, accessibility, familiarity) in 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because there are many fascinating places I haven’t explored yet and I feel more connected to the culture and history. For example, I enjoy visiting local heritage sites and natural parks that are easy to reach on weekend trips.

× But yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different scenes.

The original sentence used 'But yes' which is unnecessary; 'views' is acceptable but 'scenes' is more natural. This is a sentence structure/style improvement; remove the conjunction 'But' at the start when simply affirming. Use concise phrasing: 'Yes, I like taking pictures of different scenes.'

× I always try to capture the memorizing moments, uh, and saving my phones, umm, and uh, uh, for me, it's uh, a way to save some, uh, good memories and share my friends on social media.

✓ I always try to capture memorable moments and save them on my phone. For me, it's a way to keep good memories and share them with my friends on social media.

Multiple issues: 'memorizing moments' is incorrect adjective choice; use 'memorable moments' (adjective + noun). 'saving my phones' is incorrect; you save photos on your phone, not the phone. Parallel structure: use two coordinated verbs with same form ('capture' and 'save' or 'capturing' and 'saving'). 'share my friends' should be 'share them with my friends' (missing object and preposition). These are sentence structure and word choice errors; correct by using proper adjectives, objects, and prepositions.

× Actually it uh, depends uh, on my mood uh, because sometimes, uh, I uh, would like to see urban areas, uh, we use, but sometimes, umm, I would like to grow some uh, syringe and tranquil places.

✓ Actually it depends on my mood because sometimes I would like to see urban areas, but other times I prefer green and tranquil places.

Problems: extra filler words removed. 'we use' is meaningless and likely incorrect; removed. 'grow some syringe' is incorrect word choice and grammar—'syringe' is wrong; probably meant 'greenery' or 'green areas'. Use 'green and tranquil places' which correctly conveys meaning. Maintain parallel contrast 'sometimes... but other times...'.

× Uh, so umm, I can't say one uh, which one is the most.

✓ So I can't say which one I prefer more.

Original is ungrammatical: 'I can't say one which one is the most' is unclear. Correct structure: 'I can't say which one I prefer more' or 'I can't say which is better.' Removes fillers and uses correct comparative expression.

× You, I prefer views in my own country because, uh, I think the, uh, that, uh, in my country there are many, uh, fascinating places and I would like to explore, uh, each, umm, everyone, uh, and I think it's.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I think there are many fascinating places there, and I would like to explore each one.

Errors: extraneous 'You,' removed. 'the, uh, that, uh, in my country' is redundant; simplify to 'there are'. 'each, umm, everyone' mixes 'each' and 'everyone' incorrectly; use 'each one' or 'every one'. The sentence ended unfinished 'and I think it's.' Remove or complete; here simplified to a complete sentence. Fix article/pronoun usage and sentence completeness.