Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh), and use correct verb forms and articles. Add one specific detail about what kinds of views you like and why, using a linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I often photograph coastal sunsets because the vivid colors remind me of special moments, and I share these photos with friends on social media to keep those memories alive.

Sugestão: Use a clear topic sentence and correct grammar (e.g., 'To be honest' not 'To being honest'). Reduce repetition and use linking words (for example, because/so) to explain reasons. Provide one specific example of a rural view you enjoy and how it makes you feel.

Exemplo: To be honest, I prefer views in rural areas because they are less crowded and full of greenery, so the fresh air and natural scenery help me relax. For instance, I enjoy walking through rice terraces at sunrise because the calm atmosphere clears my mind.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and correct verb usage (e.g., 'prefer my own country'). Avoid repeating phrases and provide a specific reason or example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make your explanation coherent.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because they bring back childhood memories. For example, visiting the old seaside town where I spent summers reminds me of family trips and motivates me to explore other beautiful places in my country I haven't seen yet.

× I absolutely, I love capturing a picture in a different views, uh, whenever I travel, taking photos and uh, it's give me remember the special moments and places I shared also photos in my social media with friends.

✓ I absolutely love capturing pictures of different views whenever I travel; taking photos helps me remember the special moments and places I have visited, and I also share photos on my social media with friends.

The sentence has multiple pronoun and noun number issues. 'a picture in a different views' mixes singular and plural; use 'pictures of different views'. 'it's give me remember' incorrectly uses pronoun and verb forms; replace with 'taking photos helps me remember' where 'helps' agrees with singular subject and 'me' is correct object. 'places I shared' is ambiguous and likely needs present perfect 'places I have visited' to express past experience relevant now. Also 'photos in my social media' should be 'share photos on my social media'. Suggestion: keep subjects and objects consistent, match singular/plural, use appropriate verb forms and prepositions.

× Uh, it's a perfect uh, moment, uh, for me.

✓ It's a perfect moment for me.

The original is wordy but main error is extra fillers; 'it's a perfect moment for me' uses correct subject-verb agreement. Remove redundant fillers for clarity. Ensure 'it is' contracts to 'it's' and verb agrees with subject.

× To being honest, I prefer rural areas because rural areas are less crowded and a greenery around you.

✓ To be honest, I prefer rural areas because they are less crowded and there is greenery around you.

'To being honest' is incorrect; correct expression is 'To be honest'. 'rural areas are less crowded and a greenery around you' mixes noun phrases; use 'they are less crowded' (pronoun refers back to rural areas) and 'there is greenery around you' to indicate existence. Use 'there is' for uncountable nouns like 'greenery'.

× The fresh air, uh, the fresh air and the natural, uh, beauty you see around you.

✓ The fresh air and the natural beauty you see around you.

This fragment repeats 'the fresh air' unnecessarily. Use a single article 'the' for each coordinated noun or omit repetition for conciseness. Also ensure sentence connects to a main clause; as a fragment, turn it into part of a complete sentence.

× And it's give you a relax.

✓ And it gives you relaxation.

'it's give' is incorrect verb form; use third person singular present 'gives'. 'a relax' is incorrect noun usage; use 'relaxation' or 'a relaxed feeling'. Ensure verb agrees with subject and choose correct noun form.

× It's give your mind is relax.

✓ It relaxes your mind.

Original uses wrong verb forms and extra copula. Use simple present 'relaxes' to agree with subject 'it' and transitive structure 'relaxes your mind'. Avoid 'is relax' which mixes adjective and verb incorrectly.

× To be honest I prefer use my own country because whenever I I visit their place I remember my memories.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to visit my own country because whenever I visit those places I remember my memories.

'prefer use my own country' is incorrect; use 'prefer to visit my own country' or 'prefer my own country'. 'I I visit their place' has repeated pronoun and wrong possessive; use 'I visit those places'. 'their place' wrongly refers to plural possessive; use 'those places'. Also insert comma after introductory phrase. 'remember my memories' is redundant but acceptable; better: 'recall memories'.

× When I whenever I I was a child I visit their places so it's remind me and there are lots of beautiful places I not visit.

✓ When I was a child, I visited those places, so they remind me, and there are lots of beautiful places I have not visited.

Tense and pronoun errors: use past tense 'I was a child' and 'I visited' for past actions. 'it's remind me' should be 'they remind me' to match plural 'places'. 'I not visit' needs present perfect 'I have not visited' to indicate places still not visited. Remove repeated 'I' and use 'those places' instead of 'their places'.