Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: correct grammar (plural/singular), use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition (don’t repeat “love” and “taking picture” unnecessarily). Add a linking phrase to explain reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking photographs. I study photography as a hobby, so I often capture landscapes and city scenes to preserve memories and practice my skills.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., ‘for example’, ‘on the other hand’). Correct minor grammar (singular/plural, articles). Keep to maximum 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I like both urban and rural views for different reasons. For example, in rural areas I photograph open fields and lakes because of the fresh air and natural colors. On the other hand, I enjoy urban scenes for their historic architecture and interesting details.

Sugestão: Be specific and correct grammar: use plural forms (mountains, seasons), avoid fillers like ‘uh’, and give a direct comparison with reasons. Use linking words (e.g., ‘however’, ‘also’) and mention one clear preference or curiosity.

Exemplo: I appreciate the views in my country because we have mountains, beaches and lakes, which are very scenic. However, I am also curious about other countries that have snowy winters, because I would like to photograph snowy landscapes and see how the scenery changes.

× Yes, I love taking picture, especially because I love photography and I feel like taking picture is to keep some memory forever for me.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures, especially because I love photography, and I feel like taking pictures is a way to keep memories forever for me.

The plural noun 'pictures' should be used instead of the singular 'picture' when referring to taking photos in general. Also use the article 'a' with 'way' to form 'a way to keep memories'. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' because multiple moments are implied. Add a comma before the conjunction 'and' for clarity.

× For rural areas, I love the fresh air that I breathe and I take a picture of it because it's so beautiful.

✓ For rural areas, I love the fresh air that I breathe, and I take pictures of it because it's so beautiful.

Use the plural 'pictures' rather than 'a picture' when speaking generally. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate the coordinated clauses. The verb forms are fine but the noun number needed correction for natural English.

× But for the urban area, I love the architecture and especially all of the ancient or vintage architecture.

✓ But for urban areas, I love the architecture, especially all the ancient or vintage buildings.

Use 'urban areas' (plural) to match the question's general comparison. Saying 'the urban area' is overly specific. 'Architecture' can be used, but 'buildings' fits better with 'ancient or vintage'; also drop 'all of the' to 'all the' for natural phrasing. Add a comma before 'especially'.

× My country has a beautiful view.

✓ My country has beautiful scenery.

'A beautiful view' is grammatically possible but 'beautiful scenery' is more natural when listing multiple types of landscapes. If keeping 'view', use 'a' only when referring to a single specific view; here general 'scenery' fits better.

× There are mountain, beautiful beach, uh, lake and then the other place that's so beautiful.

✓ There are mountains, beautiful beaches, lakes, and other places that are so beautiful.

Use plural forms 'mountains', 'beaches', 'lakes', and 'places' when listing multiple types of features. Also use 'and' with proper commas to separate list items. The original used singular nouns incorrectly in a list.

× But because my country has only two seasoned, I wonder about the view in another country that has snow season.

✓ But because my country only has two seasons, I wonder about the views in another country that has a snowy season.

Correct 'seasoned' to the noun 'seasons'. Use 'only has two seasons' for natural present-tense phrasing. 'View' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally. 'Snow season' should be phrased 'a snowy season' or 'snowy seasons'; here 'a snowy season' fits. Also word order improved for natural English.