Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler and tense errors, use linking words and correct verb forms. Add one specific brief example and limit to 3–4 sentences. Focus on accuracy: e.g., 'I usually prefer to enjoy the moment rather than photograph everything.'

Exemplo: I don't really enjoy photography; I prefer to enjoy the moment. For example, when I'm on holiday I usually put my camera away and soak up the atmosphere, so I only take a few photos to remember the trip.

Sugestão: Organize into a clear topic sentence and supporting details; avoid sentence fragments and repetitions. Use linking words (however, on the other hand) and provide specific contrasts. Correct vocabulary (attractions, city life) and complete sentences. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I like both urban and rural views, depending on my mood. For example, I enjoy rural areas for their green fields and peaceful atmosphere; however, I appreciate cities for their dramatic skyline and lively street life.

Sugestão: Reduce fillers and hesitations, correct grammar (use past tense where needed and proper articles), and finish thoughts. Provide a clear preference or say you have no strong preference and give a specific example of a landscape. Use 2–3 complete sentences with concrete detail.

Exemplo: I don't have a strong preference because I moved here two years ago and I'm still getting to know the local landscapes. In my home country, Iran, many cities have distinctive views—for example, the central desert regions have dramatic dune landscapes while northern areas are very green.

× I usually prefer just enjoy the moment.

✓ I usually prefer just enjoying the moment.

The verb 'prefer' is followed by a gerund when it introduces a verb phrase (prefer doing something). Using the base form 'enjoy' after 'prefer' is incorrect here. Use 'enjoying' to form a correct verb + -ing structure. Suggestion: use 'prefer doing' or rephrase to 'I usually just prefer to enjoy the moment.'

× For example, when I'm going when I'm on holiday I tend to put my cameras away and soak up the atmosphere.

✓ For example, when I'm on holiday I tend to put my camera away and soak up the atmosphere.

The original sentence repeats 'when' creating a structure error and uses the plural 'cameras' which may be acceptable but sounds odd in context. Remove the repeated clause and use singular 'camera' for naturalness. Also ensure the dependent time clause 'when I'm on holiday' directly modifies the main clause.

× Rather than spending all my times to taking the photos, I just take a few photos.

✓ Rather than spending all my time taking photos, I just take a few.

After 'rather than' use a gerund phrase: 'spending all my time taking photos.' 'Times' is incorrect as a quantifier for duration (use 'time'), and 'to taking' incorrectly combines 'to' with a gerund. Also shorten 'take a few photos' to 'take a few' for concision.

× Actually both of them I have their own unique scenery.

✓ Actually, both of them have their own unique scenery.

The original word order is incorrect: 'both of them I have their own...' mixes subject and object. The correct subject 'both of them' should be followed by the verb 'have.' Remove the unnecessary 'I'.

× I enjoy rural views for the green fields and peaceful atmosphere.

✓ I enjoy rural views for the green fields and the peaceful atmosphere.

The sentence misses the definite article 'the' before 'peaceful atmosphere.' Use 'the peaceful atmosphere' to refer to a specific quality. The rest of the sentence structure is fine.

× But I also like urban scenery for the dramatic skyline and lively St.

✓ But I also like urban scenery for the dramatic skyline and lively streets.

'St.' is an incorrect abbreviation and unclear here. 'Streets' (plural) fits the meaning 'lively streets.' Also ensure plurality to match 'skyline and lively streets.'

× Both have unique attraction.

✓ Both have unique attractions.

'Attraction' should be plural ('attractions') because 'both' refers to two types each with more than one attractive quality. Use plural to agree with the plural subject.

× I prefer the calm of the countryside and other times the.

✓ Sometimes I prefer the calm of the countryside, and other times I prefer the bustle of the city.

Original is an incomplete sentence ending with 'the.' Provide a complete parallel structure contrasting preferences: 'Sometimes... and other times...' Fill the missing object and repeat the verb or use parallel phrasing.

× Actually, as you know, I immigrate here two years ago and I'm not very familiar, umm, uh, to this countries, uh, landscape.

✓ Actually, as you know, I immigrated here two years ago and I'm not very familiar with this country's landscape.

'Immigrate' should be in past tense ('immigrated') for a completed action two years ago (past tense error). 'Familiar with' is the correct prepositional phrase; the original used 'to.' 'This countries' mixes singular demonstrative with plural noun—use 'this country's' (singular possessive) or 'this country's landscape.' Also remove filler sounds for clarity. (Addresses past tense, preposition, and pronoun/article usage.)

× Uh, but in my country, uh, every city has their own unique, umm, views.

✓ In my country, every city has its own unique views.

'Every city' is singular, so the possessive pronoun should be 'its,' not 'their' (pronoun agreement). Remove fillers and extra commas. 'Unique views' is fine; keep concise.

× Uh, for example, in the middle of, uh, the Iran we have.

✓ For example, in the middle of Iran we have...

Do not use the definite article 'the' before country names like 'Iran' unless the official name requires it. The original sentence is also incomplete; complete the sentence with the feature you want to mention (e.g., '...we have many deserts' or similar). Remove filler words for clarity.