Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: state your main idea clearly, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one short reason or example. Keep under five sentences and use linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: I don't really like taking pictures of views because I prefer enjoying the moment rather than recording it. For example, when I visit a beach I focus on the sounds and atmosphere instead of taking many photos, so I can remember the experience more vividly.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and add specific supporting details with linking words. Reduce hesitations and avoid vague phrases like 'etcetera.' Mention particular features you like and why.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because I live in a city and I see buildings every day. In contrast, rural landscapes with mountains, wide fields and green scenery feel fresh and peaceful, which helps me relax and appreciate nature.

Sugestão: Be sensitive and concise when mentioning difficult topics. Start with a clear preference, then give a brief reason with specific contrasts and one example. Avoid overly long emotional statements and keep sentences well linked.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because many places abroad offer well-preserved natural landscapes. For instance, Switzerland's clean lakes and mountains are very appealing compared with the damaged urban scenery I saw at home in Syria, so I enjoy visiting peaceful, green environments.

× To be honest, I don't because uh, taking pictures is one of the worst thing I've ever done in throughout my life because uh, I prefer umm enjoying the moment.

✓ To be honest, I don't, because taking pictures is one of the worst things I've ever done in my life, because I prefer enjoying the moment.

Error type 8: The noun 'thing' must be plural 'things' to match 'one of the' construction, and 'in throughout my life' is redundant/incorrect; use 'in my life'. Also keep 'enjoying' as the -ing form is acceptable here. Suggestion: use 'one of the worst things I've ever done in my life' and remove redundant prepositions. Note: This suggestion addresses a pluralization issue within a sentence that also contains -ing usage; correction focuses on items listed in the provided grammar types.

× Uh, I prefer enjoy the moment.

✓ Uh, I prefer to enjoy the moment.

Error type 26 and related to verb form: After 'prefer' you must use the infinitive 'to enjoy' or the gerund 'enjoying' (prefer enjoying the moment). The original 'prefer enjoy' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'prefer to enjoy the moment' or 'prefer enjoying the moment.'

× And I think taking picture will, umm will take over this.

✓ And I think taking pictures will take over this.

Error type 7 and 1: 'taking picture' needs plural 'pictures'. The future tense 'will take over' should be written once; the duplicate 'will, umm will' is disfluent and should be reduced to a single 'will'. Suggestion: 'taking pictures will take over this' or better 'taking pictures will ruin the moment.'

× To be honest, I prefer rural areas because I live in urban area and I I get used to see tall buildings and museums etcetera.

✓ To be honest, I prefer rural areas because I live in an urban area and I am used to seeing tall buildings and museums, etcetera.

Error type 1 and 6: 'urban area' requires an article: 'an urban area'. 'I I get used to see' is incorrect: correct expression is 'I am used to seeing' (present tense passive/adjective + gerund). Suggestion: use 'I am used to seeing' and include the article 'an.'

× But in rural areas I'm not familiar at all with some mountains or, or, uh, the ground or the, the green scene.

✓ But in rural areas I'm not familiar at all with mountains, the terrain, or the green scenery.

Error type 11: 'familiar at all with some mountains' is awkward; 'familiar with' should be followed by a noun without 'at all' between them. 'The ground' is better as 'the terrain' and 'the green scene' should be 'green scenery.' Suggestion: restructure to 'not familiar at all with mountains, the terrain, or the green scenery.'

× Absolutely. I prefer views in different countries.

✓ Absolutely. I prefer views in other countries.

Error type 14 and 26: 'different countries' is not wrong but 'other countries' more clearly contrasts with 'my own country' from the question. Suggestion: use 'other countries' to answer the question directly.

× I was born in Syria, I live there and you know, there is too much war in Syria and all of the building and all the views are destroyed.

✓ I was born in Syria and used to live there, but there has been so much war in Syria that many buildings and views have been destroyed.

Error type 26 and 5: Tense and sentence connection problems. Use 'used to live' if the speaker no longer lives there; 'there is too much war' is awkward—use 'there has been so much war.' 'All of the building' should be 'many buildings' and 'are destroyed' is better as present perfect passive 'have been destroyed' to show the ongoing result. Suggestion: clarify current residence and use correct tense and plural nouns.

× That's why I prefer something like Switzerland and green landscapes or mountain.

✓ That's why I prefer places like Switzerland with green landscapes and mountains.

Error type 13: 'something like Switzerland' and 'green landscapes or mountain' are awkward. Use 'places like Switzerland' and plural 'mountains' to match 'landscapes.' Suggestion: say 'places like Switzerland with green landscapes and mountains.'