Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid grammatical errors, and use linking words for coherence. Replace vague phrases with specific ones and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences. For example, say why you take photos and what effect they have on you.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. When I visit a beautiful place, I like to capture the scenery because it helps me remember the atmosphere and the colors. Later, looking at the pictures makes me happy and reminds me of the trip.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect expressions (e.g., 'who' for places). Use descriptive vocabulary (peaceful, fresh air, open fields) and limit to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside is calmer and less polluted. For example, rural areas have fresh air, open fields and natural sounds, which make it easier to relax. Because of that peaceful atmosphere, I often enjoy singing or walking outdoors when I visit the countryside.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar. If you haven't traveled abroad, say so concisely and then describe what you like about your country with specific examples. Avoid unclear words ('Mike') and use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I prefer the views in my own country because I have not traveled abroad yet. Pakistan has many beautiful places such as Naran, Kaghan, Swat and Kashmir, which offer stunning mountains, lakes and valleys. For these reasons, I feel more connected to and proud of the scenery at home.

× Whenever I went to any place who is who is beautiful and it has very beautiful views.

✓ Whenever I go to a place that is beautiful and has very nice views.

The original sentence has incorrect relative clause structure ('who is who is') and tense inconsistency ('went' with 'whenever' implies habitual action, so present tense 'go' is correct). Use 'that' or 'which' for places (not 'who'), and reduce redundancy ('very beautiful' -> 'very nice' or 'beautiful'). Suggestion: Use 'whenever' with present tense for habitual actions and use 'that' for things/places.

× So I capture this moment and it gave me happiness when I watched later.

✓ So I capture the moment and it gives me happiness when I watch it later.

Tense consistency is required: the student uses present habitual 'I do like' earlier, so use present simple 'capture' and 'gives' and 'watch' for general statements. Also add object 'it' after 'watch'. 'Capture the moment' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: Maintain consistent present tense for habitual actions and include necessary objects.

× Also, I prefer rural areas because I love that place who is not building and no smoke, no pollution.

✓ Also, I prefer rural areas because I love places with no buildings, smoke, or pollution.

Incorrect pronoun 'that' and 'who' used for places; 'who' should refer to people. The sentence also mixes singular/plural ('place' vs 'areas'). Use plural 'places' to match 'rural areas' and list items with parallel structure ('no buildings, smoke, or pollution'). Suggestion: Use 'which' or 'that' for things, but better to rephrase using 'places' and ensure parallel list items.

× So I prefer rural areas. It has many fresh airs and you sit in field, you can sit in peaceful place and you can sing.

✓ So I prefer rural areas. They have fresh air, and you can sit in a field, relax in a peaceful place, and sing.

Subject 'areas' is plural, so use 'they' not 'it'. 'Fresh air' is uncountable (not 'airs'). Add articles: 'a field' and 'a peaceful place'. Improve flow by separating actions with commas and using parallel verbs. Suggestion: Match plural subjects with plural pronouns and use uncountable nouns correctly; include articles for singular countable nouns.

× To be honest, I don't comparison what others country to my country because I didn't go any other country.

✓ To be honest, I don't compare other countries to my country because I haven't been to any other country.

Incorrect verb form 'don't comparison' should be 'don't compare' (verb). 'Others country' is wrong; use 'other countries'. For experience, present perfect 'haven't been' is appropriate rather than simple past 'didn't go'. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and present perfect for life experience when it relates to unspecified time before now.

× Like if I talk about Naran, Kagan, Sawat, Kashmir, these are beautiful areas Pakistan have.

✓ For example, if I talk about Naran, Kaghan, Swat, and Kashmir, these are beautiful areas that Pakistan has.

Missing preposition/relative clause: use 'that Pakistan has' or 'in Pakistan'. Also corrected place names spelling (Kaghan, Swat) and list punctuation. 'Pakistan have' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'Pakistan has' is correct. Suggestion: Use correct verb agreement and include 'that' or 'in' for clarity; ensure proper nouns are spelled correctly.

× So yes, I prefer Mike.

✓ So yes, I prefer my country.

'I prefer Mike' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or error. Context indicates preference for own country, so correct to 'my country'. If 'Mike' was meant as 'Pakistan' or 'mine', use 'my country' or 'mine'. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns or nouns reflect intended meaning; replace unclear names with the correct referent.