Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Work on grammar, word choice and clarity. Keep the answer concise (max 4–5 sentences), start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors (plural forms, verb agreement) and replace unclear phrases (e.g. “flying bars”) with accurate vocabulary (e.g. “beaches”, “cityscapes”).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos and short videos of different scenes. For example, I often photograph natural landscapes like beaches and forests because they look beautiful at sunrise. I also like capturing festivals to preserve memories, as the lively colors and music make the scenes memorable.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and then give two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (use ‘prefer rural areas’, plural/singular agreement, and articles). Use precise vocabulary like ‘peaceful’, ‘open spaces’, and ‘fresh air’.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they are much quieter than cities. For instance, rural landscapes have wide open fields and fewer people, so you can enjoy peaceful walks. In addition, the clean air and natural sounds help me relax and recharge.

Sugestão: Be specific and check facts, and avoid vague or incorrect phrases. Begin with a clear statement, then give one or two accurate examples using linking words. Correct grammar (articles, plural forms) and use correct names (e.g. Cox’s Bazar). Explain briefly why these places appeal to you.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I find the scenery very beautiful. For example, Bangladesh’s Cox’s Bazar has a long sandy beach that I enjoy visiting, and there are many rivers and green hills where families relax. These places feel familiar and offer unique natural beauty I appreciate.

× Yes, I like taking picture and short video in different fields such as natural place, flying bars and lovely festival.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures and short videos in different places such as natural areas, flying kites events and lovely festivals.

The nouns 'picture' and 'short video' should be plural because the speaker indicates a general habit (plural required). 'Field' is incorrect contextually; 'places' or 'areas' is appropriate. 'Natural place' should be 'natural areas' for generality. 'Flying bars' is likely a miswording; guessing the intended meaning is 'flying kites events' or 'kite-flying events' so corrected to 'flying kites events'. 'Lovely festival' should be plural 'lovely festivals' to match the general preference. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when referring to activities in general (taking pictures, short videos, festivals). Use appropriate collocations: 'natural areas', 'kite-flying events'.

× I love to capture memories and it give me a sense of relaxation and freedom.

✓ I love to capture memories and it gives me a sense of relaxation and freedom.

Subject-verb agreement requires the third-person singular verb form 'gives' after subject 'it'. This is a present simple tense agreement issue; changing 'give' to 'gives' fixes the sentence. Suggestion: For third-person singular subjects in present simple use verb+s (he/she/it gives).

× I prefer fuse in rural areas because it's uh, more quiet than cities.

✓ I prefer to stay in rural areas because they're, uh, quieter than cities.

The original 'prefer fuse' is incorrect; likely intended 'prefer to stay' or 'prefer life' — corrected to 'prefer to stay'. 'It's' refers to singular but 'rural areas' is plural, so use 'they're'. 'More quiet' is acceptable but 'quieter' is the correct comparative form. Suggestion: Use 'prefer to + verb' for preferences and use comparative adjectives ('quieter'). Ensure pronoun agrees with plural noun ('they're').

× Uh, rural areas are very lovely place and many open space where people can enjoy their life peacefully.

✓ Uh, rural areas are very lovely places and have many open spaces where people can enjoy their lives peacefully.

'Place' should be plural 'places' to agree with 'rural areas'. 'Many open space' must be plural 'many open spaces' or 'much open space' depending on meaning. 'Enjoy their life' should be 'enjoy their lives' to match plural 'people'. Also add 'have' to connect 'rural areas' with what they contain. Suggestion: Match singular/plural consistently: plural subject -> plural nouns/pronouns ('areas' -> 'places', 'spaces', 'lives').

× Uh, people can get fresh air and uh can relax.

✓ People can get fresh air and relax.

The repetition of 'uh' is a filler; also 'and uh can relax' is redundant. Simplify to parallel structure: 'can get' and 'relax' (both verbs coordinate) or 'can get... and can relax'. Suggestion: Maintain parallel verb forms when coordinating and avoid redundant repetition: 'can get fresh air and relax' or 'can get fresh air and can relax'.

× I prefer views in my own country because it's very beautiful.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because it is very beautiful.

The sentence is acceptable but 'it's' expanded to 'it is' for formality; no plural error. Included to maintain consistency. (This entry is optional; minimal change.) Suggestion: Use full form 'it is' in formal speech, though 'it's' is acceptable in conversation.

× Uh, Bangladesh has a many natural destinations such as Cox Berger sea breeze, which is the largest sea bass in the world.

✓ Bangladesh has many natural destinations such as Cox's Bazar sea beach, which is one of the largest sea beaches in the world.

'a many' is incorrect; use 'many' without 'a'. 'Cox Berger sea breeze' appears to be a mishearing; likely 'Cox's Bazar sea beach' is intended. 'Sea bass' is incorrect (a fish); use 'sea beach' or 'beach', and 'largest' should be qualified: Cox's Bazar is among the longest beaches. Adjusted to 'one of the largest sea beaches'. Suggestion: Remove incorrect article before 'many' and use correct place name and noun: 'Cox's Bazar beach' and 'one of the largest beaches'.

× Many mountains and many river people, uh, can enjoy the natural beauty in.

✓ There are many hills and rivers where people can enjoy the natural beauty.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and missing preposition object. 'Many mountains and many river people' is jumbled; corrected to 'many hills and rivers' and used 'where people can enjoy the natural beauty'. Also added 'There are' to introduce existence and corrected 'mountains' to 'hills' if more natural for Bangladesh, but 'mountains' is acceptable if intended. Suggestion: Use 'There are' for existence statements and structure clauses correctly: 'There are many mountains and rivers where people can enjoy the natural beauty.'