Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense phrasing (e.g., “it will be meaningful until many years I saw it again”).

Exemplo: I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes to capture the atmosphere, so years later I can recall how I felt.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with correct vocabulary and smoother linking. Replace informal fillers like “uh” and awkward words such as “relaxable.” Use linking words (because, so, therefore) to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I live in a busy city and countryside scenery helps me relax. For instance, quiet fields and forests let me escape noise and recharge, so I often go there on weekends.

Sugestão: Open with a direct statement, then give specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague phrases like “giving you some” and repetitive wording (“variety knowledge” / “various knowledge”). Use linking words (because, for example, therefore) to structure the response.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they reveal different cultures and ways of life. For example, photographing markets in Spain taught me about local food and traditions, which broadened my perspective on the world.

× I like to record my wonderful life and it will be meaningful until many years I saw it again and I like to record the beautiful moments.

✓ I like to record my wonderful life, and it will be meaningful when I see it again many years later; I also like to record the beautiful moments.

Original sentence uses incorrect verb forms and word order for time expressions. 'until many years I saw it again' is ungrammatical. Use 'when I see it again many years later' to express future/recalling time. Also split into clearer clauses and add 'also' to link the repeated idea. Use present simple 'I like' consistently and 'will be' for future meaning is acceptable but 'when I see' is clearer.

× I prefer views in rural areas because my daily life is spread in urban areas and I like to enjoy the rural areas life and it can make me more relaxable and uh, get far away from the noisy cities.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because my daily life takes place in urban areas, and I enjoy rural life because it makes me more relaxed and allows me to get away from noisy cities.

Problems: 'spread in urban areas' is wrong — use 'takes place in' or 'is in'. 'Rural areas life' should be 'rural life'. 'Relaxable' is not natural; use 'relaxed'. 'Get far away from' is wordy; use 'get away from'. Rephrase for natural preposition and collocation use.

× And I can, yes.

✓ And I can.

Fragment 'And I can, yes.' is incomplete and informal. Remove the filler 'yes' and finish the thought if needed (e.g., 'And I can relax there'). The present participle error stems from an unfinished verb phrase; provide a complete verb phrase to be grammatical.

× Giving you some, I prefer views in other countries because through views we can learn a country's culture.

✓ To give an example, I prefer views in other countries because through them we can learn about a country's culture.

'Giving you some' is an incorrect and awkward phrase; use 'To give an example' or 'For example'. 'Through views we can learn a country's culture' needs a pronoun 'them' referring to 'views' and 'learn about' is required. Adjust pronoun use and verb phrase for clarity.

× So I like to learn more about the world culture and get variety knowledge or get various knowledge and views in other countries may be different from mine.

✓ So I like to learn more about world cultures and gain various kinds of knowledge; the views in other countries may be different from mine.

Problems: 'the world culture' should be plural 'world cultures' or 'global culture'. 'Variety knowledge' is incorrect; use 'various knowledge' or better 'various kinds of knowledge' or 'a variety of knowledge'. Split into two clauses for clarity and correct adjective/noun collocations.

× So I like to broaden my horizon.

✓ So I like to broaden my horizons.

'Horizon' is usually used in plural when referring to one's range of experience: 'broaden my horizons'. This is a common collocational and idiomatic correction; change singular to plural to sound natural.