Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations, and add one or two specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas. Pronounce plurals and articles correctly and avoid repeating words.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I visited northern Pakistan I took many photos of the mountains, rivers and green valleys. In particular, I like close-up shots of mountain peaks and wide shots of river valleys because they show scale and colour.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and grammatical errors (use present tense consistently and correct nouns).

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because cities offer better infrastructure and services. For instance, urban areas have well-maintained roads and public transport, and they also provide access to hospitals and universities, which improves people’s daily lives.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then add specific, coherent details and use linking words. Correct grammar and avoid repetition; mention frequency correctly and provide one reason why you prefer them.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country, Pakistan. Every three or four months I travel to the northern areas because they have stunning mountains, lakes and rivers. I especially enjoy the contrast between snowy peaks and clear blue lakes, which makes the scenery unique.

× Yes, I take picture of different views, like when I went to northern side of Pakistan.

✓ Yes, I take pictures of different views, like when I went to the northern side of Pakistan.

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the speaker means more than one photo. Also 'northern side' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific region. Improve by using plural nouns for countable items when referring to multiple instances and include 'the' for specific geographic areas.

× So most of the time I took pictures of myself and the mountains and the rivers and the beauty of, uh, the Green Mountains.

✓ So most of the time I took pictures of myself, the mountains, the rivers, and the beauty of the Green Mountains.

The sentence uses past tense 'took' correctly, but the list needs parallel structure and punctuation. Remove extra 'the' before some items is optional, but keep consistency. Use commas to separate list items and avoid filler words. Improve by keeping parallel noun forms and clear punctuation.

× I like urban areas because they give facilities to people, uh, like infrastructures better and the universities and the hospitals and the beautiful roads.

✓ I like urban areas because they provide better facilities for people, such as improved infrastructure, universities, hospitals, and nice roads.

Use 'provide' instead of 'give' for facilities and 'for people' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Infrastructures' is uncountable so use 'infrastructure'. Improve by selecting correct verbs and prepositions ('provide' + 'for') and using uncountable nouns correctly.

× So it, uh, improve our life and it gave opportunity to uh, people to, uh, uh.

✓ So it improves our lives and gives people opportunities.

Mismatch of tenses: 'improve' should be third person singular present 'improves' and 'gave' is past; keep present 'gives'. 'Life' should be plural 'lives' when speaking generally about people. Use 'opportunities' plural. Improve by maintaining consistent present tense and subject-verb agreement.

× I visit only Pakistan and in Pakistan I visit, uh, after three to four months, uh, northern side of Pakistan, uh, there are a lot of mountains, uh, beaches and, uh, the rivers and the beautiful lakes and the beautiful, uh.

✓ I have only visited Pakistan, and every three to four months I visit the northern part of Pakistan, where there are a lot of mountains, beaches, rivers, and beautiful lakes.

Tense and aspect: use present perfect 'have visited' to indicate life experience. 'I visit after three to four months' is awkward; 'every three to four months' expresses frequency. Use 'the northern part' or 'the northern side' with 'the'. Maintain parallel noun list and remove filler. Improve by using appropriate tense for experience and clear time expressions.