Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (what you photograph, where, and one reason). Use linking words for coherence and correct simple errors (e.g., “relieve stress” → “relieve stress”).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph mountains and wildlife because their peacefulness helps me relax and reduces my stress.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and support it with a clear reason and one specific example. Remove repeated words and avoid one-word conclusions like “that’s all.” Use a linking phrase to connect the reason.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because I find city parks and riversides peaceful. For instance, walking along a riverfront in my city helps me unwind after work and enjoy modern architecture.

Sugestão: Answer directly (own country or other countries) and explain with specific, grammatical sentences. Avoid hesitations and repetitions. Give one clear example and finish the thought. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because the air quality and scenery tend to be cleaner. For example, when I visited Kazakhstan I noticed clearer skies and less industrial pollution, which made sightseeing much more enjoyable.

× Yes, I love taking pictures, especially of the wildlife, for example, mountains, big mountains. It helps me relieve stress and get relieve stress and feel calm, so I really enjoy it.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures, especially of wildlife, for example, mountains. It helps me relieve stress and feel calm, so I really enjoy it.

The phrase 'get relieve stress' is incorrect. Use the verb 'relieve' with an object (relieve stress) or use the verb 'get' with a past participle or adjective (get relieved or feel relieved). Also avoid redundant repetition. Suggestion: use 'relieve stress' or 'feel relieved' and maintain the -ing form 'taking pictures' correctly.

× Well, mostly I prefer the urban areas because because I feel calm. I feel calm and relieve stress if I visit this type of place and and that's all.

✓ Well, mostly I prefer urban areas because I feel calm and relieved when I visit this type of place.

There is repetition ('because because', 'and and that's all') and awkward structure. Use 'prefer urban areas' without the definite article for general preference. Use 'feel calm and relieved' not 'relieve stress' (which would require an object). Use 'when I visit' for habitual situations. Remove redundant phrases.

× To be honest, I mostly prefer and other countries atmosphere because my my my country, my country atmosphere is not clean and there are lots of factories and high pollution here. But when I visit the Kazakhstan I find out I found out atmosphere is.

✓ To be honest, I mostly prefer the atmosphere of other countries because the atmosphere in my country is not clean and there are lots of factories and high levels of pollution here. But when I visited Kazakhstan, I found the atmosphere much cleaner.

Preposition and article misuse: use 'the atmosphere of other countries' or 'other countries' atmospheres'. Use 'the atmosphere in my country' not 'my country atmosphere'. Use 'high levels of pollution' for clarity. For the final clause, tense and article were wrong: say 'visited Kazakhstan' (past) and 'I found the atmosphere much cleaner.' Also remove repeated words and unnecessary 'the' before country names when not required; 'Kazakhstan' normally takes no 'the'.