Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, fluency and coherence. Use correct verb forms and articles, avoid filler words, and finish ideas. Give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Pronounce key words clearly and keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing sunsets, birds and gardens because the light and colours change quickly, which makes each shot unique. For instance, I often go to the local park with my grandfather where we find quiet corners and interesting subjects to capture.

Sugestão: Work on accuracy, vocabulary and completeness. Use correct plural/singular forms and articles (e.g., 'malls', 'cafés', 'the busy streets', 'modern architecture'), and finish the contrast if you start one. Use linking words (for example, moreover, however) to structure ideas logically.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because cities offer a greater variety of scenes and activities. For example, there are interesting shops, malls and cafés where I can relax, and the busy streets and modern architecture often inspire my photography. However, I sometimes enjoy rural landscapes for their peaceful atmosphere.

Sugestão: Clarify meaning, improve grammar, and be specific. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give 1–2 specific reasons with examples. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., 'other continents contribute to Snatindram') and use correct sentence structure and vocabulary.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I am familiar with its diverse landscapes and local culture. For example, I can visit coastal towns, mountain villages and historical districts, and I feel a stronger connection to places that reflect my heritage and memories.

× I fond of taking pictures of different views like sunset, birds, gardens and also people.

✓ I am fond of taking pictures of different views such as sunsets, birds, gardens, and people.

Student omitted the verb be and used 'fond' without it; also singular/plural and list punctuation issues. This falls under incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs because 'fond' requires the verb 'be' to form the correct adjective phrase. Correction adds the auxiliary verb 'am', pluralizes 'sunsets' for general meaning, uses 'such as' for examples, and adds commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'be + adjective' constructions (I am fond of ...), pluralize when speaking generally, and separate items with commas.

× Most of the time I took pictures in park with my grandfather and it uh, this victor's is really.

✓ Most of the time I take pictures in the park with my grandfather; uh, this pastime is really meaningful.

Original used past tense 'took' inconsistently with 'Most of the time' which indicates habitual action, so present simple 'take' is correct. Also missing article before 'park' and the clause 'this victor's is really' is unclear; likely meant 'this pastime is really meaningful' or similar. This is a past tense issue because the wrong tense was chosen for a habitual action. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions ('Most of the time I take pictures...'), include articles ('the park'), and choose clear nouns ('pastime').

× For example, there are interesting shops, mall, cafe where I can relax.

✓ For example, there are interesting shops, malls, and cafés where I can relax.

The list mixes singular and plural nouns ('shops, mall, cafe'); this is an incorrect use of quantifiers/number. Use plurals consistently when listing multiple types and add 'and' before the final item. Also pluralize 'mall' to 'malls' unless referring to a specific mall. Suggestion: keep number consistent in a list and use commas and 'and' correctly.

× Also the busy St. and modern architect inspire me thinking and make it easy to meet friends or try new activities.

✓ Also the busy streets and modern architecture inspire my thinking and make it easy to meet friends or try new activities.

Errors include incorrect abbreviations ('St.'), noun form ('architect' should be 'architecture') and verb/noun collocation ('inspire my thinking' not 'inspire me thinking'). This is incorrect use of adjectives/nouns. Correction uses 'streets' and 'architecture', adjusts collocation to 'inspire my thinking', and keeps 'make it easy' structure. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and collocations (architecture, inspire my thinking).

× On the other hand.

✓ On the other hand, I sometimes prefer rural areas for their natural scenery and quiet.

'On the other hand.' is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause; this is a sentence structure error. Add a contrasting clause to complete the thought. Suggestion: always follow transitional phrases with a complete clause.

× Firstly, I prefer my host country because in my country have different local areas and other continents which contribute and devoted to Snatindram which is related to me.

✓ Firstly, I prefer my home country because it has different local regions and cultures that relate to me.

Original has incorrect tense/structure: missing subject for 'have', awkward phrase 'other continents', and unclear 'contribute and devoted to Snatindram'. This falls under present tense/structure issues because 'have' needs subject ('it has') and present simple is appropriate. Simplify to 'it has different local regions and cultures that relate to me.' Suggestion: use clear subject-verb structure ('it has'), avoid confusing or irrelevant terms, and use simpler vocabulary to express connection to one's country.