Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it's a bit wordy and has minor grammar issues and repetition. Aim to produce a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Reduce redundancy by avoiding repeated phrases (e.g., "I love"). Use correct plural/singular forms and articles (e.g., "all kinds of views").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like scenic landscapes because they lift my mood when I’m feeling down, and photos help me keep memories of beautiful places. For example, I often photograph sunsets and park scenes because their colours are calming.

Sugestão: The main idea is understandable but there are multiple errors in word choice, grammar and coherence. Correct key vocabulary (e.g., "views" not "wheels"), avoid filler words ("umm"), and finish your sentences. Use linking words to connect reasons (e.g., "because", "also"). Provide one clear reason and a brief example. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the lively atmosphere of cities. They are crowded and diverse, so you can see many different people and dynamic scenes; for example, I like photographing busy markets and street performers.

Sugestão: Your response has a clear reason but contains hesitations and some grammatical mistakes. Remove fillers, correct phrases (e.g., "I prefer views in my own country"), and combine sentences for fluency. Add a specific example to support your point (e.g., a nearby city or region).

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because travelling domestically is cheaper and helps me get to know my culture better. For instance, I enjoy visiting coastal towns nearby to photograph local festivals and traditional architecture.

× I love taking pictures of all kind of views, especially the ones which are pleasant because I love looking at them when I am in a bad mood and I love to keep memory of all the pretty things I see.

✓ I love taking pictures of all kinds of views, especially the ones that are pleasant, because I love looking at them when I am in a bad mood and I like to keep memories of all the pretty things I see.

'All kind' is incorrect; the plural 'kinds' is required when referring to multiple types. 'Which' can be used for non-defining clauses but 'that' is more natural here. 'Keep memory' is uncountable/unnatural; use 'keep memories' or 'remember'. Also changed second 'love' to 'like' to avoid repetition, though this is stylistic rather than grammatical.

× I mostly prefer wheels in urban areas because I love cities.

✓ I mostly prefer views in urban areas because I love cities.

The student likely meant 'views' not 'wheels'; 'wheels' is an incorrect word choice (lexical/ pronoun/noun misuse). This is corrected to the intended noun 'views' to match the question and context.

× I love because they're always crowded and you see different types of people and whenever you see different types, they are all there.

✓ I love them because cities are always crowded, and you see many different kinds of people; whenever you encounter different types, they are usually there.

Original sentence is fragmented and missing a clear object after 'love'. Rewrote to supply the object 'them' and improve cohesion. Replaced repetitive 'different types' with 'many different kinds of people' and clarified 'they are all there' to 'they are usually there' for naturalness.

× Carries different kinds of energies within and umm, also it's more rushy, which is like my.

✓ They carry different kinds of energy, and it's also busier, which suits me.

Sentence lacked a clear subject; 'Carries' should be 'They carry' referring to cities/views. 'Energies' is better singular 'energy' as an uncountable noun in this context. 'Rushy' is nonstandard; use 'busier'. 'Which is like my' is ungrammatical — corrected to 'which suits me' to express preference.

× Umm, I prefer use in my own country because uh, it does not cost much when you travel around in your own country as compared to different other countries.

✓ Umm, I prefer travel in my own country because it does not cost as much when you travel around your own country compared to other countries.

'Prefer use' is incorrect collocation; should be 'prefer travel' or 'prefer to travel'. Removed redundant 'different' before 'other countries' and corrected 'cost much' to 'cost as much' for the comparative structure. Also streamlined repetition of 'in your own country'.

× Because in travelling around your country makes you more familiar with the culture and atmosphere.

✓ Travelling around your country makes you more familiar with the culture and atmosphere.

Sentence begins with 'Because' creating a sentence fragment. Removing 'Because' makes it an independent clause that correctly follows from the previous sentence. Also 'travelling' spelling is retained; ensure consistency with regional spelling if necessary.