Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm), correct basic grammar (singular/plural, verb forms), and give one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep your answer to no more than five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures of different scenes. For example, I often photograph animals and landscapes because capturing those moments makes me feel calm. Also, when I look at the photos later, they help me remember special times.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about what you like and give one concrete example or comparison. Avoid repetition (sea and ocean are similar) and keep it within a few sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views to urban ones. For example, I like coastal and mountain landscapes because they feel calm and peaceful, unlike the busy streets of my hometown. This contrast helps me relax and recharge.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer, remove fillers, fix grammar and use linking words to qualify your opinion. Mention specific differences and a short reason or example to support your preference.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultures. For instance, I once visited a coastal town abroad with architecture and colors very different from my hometown, which made the scenery more exciting to me.

× Yes, I enjoy taking picture of everything such as animals, people and including sceneries.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of everything, such as animals, people, and scenery.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'everything' implies many items (singular/plural issue, ID 1). 'Including sceneries' is unnecessary and awkward; use 'such as' once and the uncountable noun 'scenery' rather than plural 'sceneries'. Also add commas to separate items for clarity. Suggested improvement: use plural for countable nouns when referring to multiple items and prefer 'scenery' as an uncountable noun for landscapes.

× Umm it's make me feel calm and when I think about it I can open it and look at the memories.

✓ Umm it makes me feel calm, and when I think about them I can look at the memories.

The subject 'it' (referring to 'pictures') requires the third person singular verb form 'makes' (ID 2). Also pronoun reference was inconsistent: use 'them' for plural 'pictures' rather than 'it'. 'Open it and look at the memories' is unnatural; 'look at the memories' is acceptable but better to say 'look at them' or 'remember the memories'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and pronouns correctly match plurality.

× Personally, I prefer rural areas. I enjoy looking at the sea, mountain and ocean is quite calm and peaceful and different from my hometown.

✓ Personally, I prefer rural areas. I enjoy looking at the sea, the mountains, and the ocean; they are quite calm and peaceful and different from my hometown.

List items need articles and parallel structure. Use 'the mountains' (plural) and 'the ocean' with 'the' for specific natural features (article/quantifier issues, IDs 22 and 14). Also 'is quite calm' incorrectly uses singular verb for a list; use 'they are' for plural subjects (subject-verb agreement, ID 27). Suggestion: maintain parallel structure in lists and ensure verb agrees with compound subjects.

× I like the views of other countries, it doesn't mean umm the view in my hometown is not beautiful but in other countries it's different and give me feel exciting about the sceneries.

✓ I like the views of other countries. That doesn't mean the views in my hometown are not beautiful, but in other countries they are different and make me feel excited about the scenery.

Run-on comma splice: split into separate sentences or use conjunctions (sentence structure error, ID 26). 'The view in my hometown' should be plural 'the views' to match earlier reference (quantifier/plural issue, ID 1). 'It' should be 'they' to match plural 'views' (pronoun agreement, ID 12). 'Give me feel exciting' is ungrammatical; use 'make me feel excited' (incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and verb patterns, IDs 13 and 8). 'Sceneries' should be 'scenery' (uncountable noun) or 'views' (quantifier issue, ID 14). Suggestion: keep number agreement, avoid comma splices, and use correct verb + adjective patterns like 'make me feel excited'.