Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g. 'sometimes'), and avoid repetition. Add one specific brief detail and use a linking word for contrast (e.g. 'however'). Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I sometimes like to take pictures to capture memories, especially when I visit a new city. For example, I photograph interesting buildings and street scenes to remember the trip. However, other times I prefer to put my camera away and just enjoy the view because it helps me relax.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer (e.g. 'I like both, but...'), fix grammar ('since I was born and brought up'), avoid repeating words ('vibrant' twice), and use a clear linking phrase to contrast. Provide one concrete example of what you like in each area.

Exemplo: I like both urban and rural views, but if I had to choose I slightly prefer urban scenes. Since I was born and brought up in the city, I enjoy the skyline and colourful night lights, such as the busy downtown by the river. However, I also value the countryside near my in-laws for its quiet walking trails and wide-open fields.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear direct answer (e.g. 'I prefer views in other countries, especially Canada'), maintain correct tense and avoid redundancy ('dramatic and diverse' is fine but add a specific example). Use one linking word to explain the reason and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries, particularly in Canada where I now live. For example, the Rocky Mountains and crystal-clear lakes create dramatic scenery that I didn't see in my home country, so I find these views more impressive.

× Actually, it depends on my mind.

✓ Actually, it depends on my mood.

The phrase 'depends on my mind' is unnatural; 'mood' is the correct noun to express changing personal feelings. This is a vocabulary/word choice correction within present-tense context. Use 'depends on my mood' to convey that your preference changes according to how you feel.

× Sometime I like to take pictures to capture memories.

✓ Sometimes I like to take pictures to capture memories.

The word 'Sometime' is singular and means 'at an unspecified time'; the adverb 'Sometimes' (plural sense) is needed to indicate 'occasionally'. Replace with 'Sometimes' to match the intended frequency expression.

× For instance, if I'm visiting a new city, I would definitely take pictures.

✓ For instance, if I'm visiting a new city, I will definitely take pictures.

The conditional mixes present continuous with a conditional 'would'. For a real present/future conditional, use 'will' instead of 'would' to indicate a real likelihood. Use 'will definitely take' for a firm future action when visiting.

× But on the other hand, sometime I just stand and enjoy the view because it helps me relax.

✓ But on the other hand, sometimes I just stand and enjoy the view because it helps me relax.

Again 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to express that the action happens occasionally. Use the adverb 'sometimes' for frequency.

× Or rural areas.

✓ I prefer rural areas.

The fragment 'Or rural areas.' lacks a subject and verb and appears as an incomplete reply. Provide a full sentence that matches the question: 'I prefer rural areas.' or 'I prefer urban or rural areas.' depending on intent. Complete sentences are required.

× I like both kind of views since I born and brought up in the city.

✓ I like both kinds of views since I was born and brought up in the city.

Multiple issues: 'both kind' should be 'both kinds' (plural), and the clause 'since I born and brought up' is ungrammatical — it needs passive past construction 'I was born' and 'brought up' often paired as 'was born and brought up' or 'was born and raised'. Use 'I was born and brought up in the city.'

× So I like the vibrant skyline, bustling vibrant lights and I find them exciting.

✓ So I like the vibrant skyline and bustling lights; I find them exciting.

Repeating 'vibrant' is redundant. Use 'vibrant skyline and bustling lights' and separate clauses with appropriate punctuation. This improves adjective usage and sentence flow.

× But I also appreciate the peaceful, scenic atmosphere of the countryside where my in-laws live because it's quiet and relaxing.

✓ But I also appreciate the peaceful, scenic atmosphere of the countryside where my in-laws live, because it is quiet and relaxing.

Mostly correct; change contraction 'it's' to 'it is' only if formality is preferred. Added a comma before 'because' to clarify the reason clause. This addresses clarity in present-tense description.

× Since I moved to Canada, I have really enjoyed the scenery here.

✓ Since I moved to Canada, I have really enjoyed the scenery here.

This sentence is grammatically correct: 'Since I moved to Canada' (past event) with present perfect 'have enjoyed' is appropriate to indicate an experience continuing to present. No change needed, but included to confirm correctness.

× The mountains, lakes and varied architecture make the views very impressive.

✓ The mountains, lakes, and varied architecture make the views very impressive.

Add a serial comma after 'lakes' for clarity in lists (optional style), but grammatically the original is acceptable. This is a minor punctuation suggestion rather than a grammatical correction.

× I prefer these views to those in my home country because they feel more dramatic and diverse and I haven't seen anything like them when I travel abroad.

✓ I prefer these views to those in my home country because they feel more dramatic and diverse, and I haven't seen anything like them when I traveled abroad.

Tense mismatch: 'I haven't seen anything like them when I travel abroad' mixes present perfect with simple present. Better to use past tense 'traveled' with 'haven't seen' or adjust to present: 'I haven't seen anything like them when I travel abroad' can be acceptable if you mean up to now on trips — keep consistent. The corrected version uses past 'traveled' to match the time reference of past travels. Also added a comma before 'and' for clarity.