Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct verb forms and articles. Add one supporting detail and a short example using linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel, I usually photograph landmarks, interesting buildings and local people, so I can remember the trip. For example, when I visited Chengdu last year, I spent an afternoon photographing exhibits and historic courtyards in the museums, which helped me learn more about the city.

Sugestão: Make a direct clear position in the topic sentence and correct word choice and grammar. Use linking words (however, although) to compare urban and rural views, and provide one specific reason for each preference.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views for photography, although I also like rural scenery. Urban areas such as Shanghai have striking skyscrapers and bustling streets that create dynamic photos; however, rural areas offer peaceful landscapes and traditional villages that capture a different kind of beauty.

Sugestão: Give a clear, concise opinion first and avoid repetition. Use correct grammar and finish your example. Provide one or two specific reasons and a short finished example to support your view.

Exemplo: It depends, but I usually prefer views in other countries because they feel novel. When you live in your home city you might become used to the sights, whereas visiting a new country introduces unfamiliar architecture and customs; for example, I felt excited photographing traditional markets in Morocco because everything looked different from home.

× Of course, when I travel to somewhere, I often photo.

✓ Of course, when I travel somewhere, I often take photos.

The verb 'photo' is a noun; the sentence needs the verb phrase 'take photos'. Also 'to somewhere' is incorrect—use 'somewhere' without 'to'. Use present simple 'travel' and 'often take' for habitual actions.

× I often take photos about the sites, the buildings and local people.

✓ I often take photos of the sights, the buildings, and local people.

Use the preposition 'of' with 'take photos of'. Also 'sites' should be 'sights' (places of interest). Include commas to separate items in a list.

× For example, I when I travel to Chengdu, I often to visit the different museums and take the photo.

✓ For example, when I travel to Chengdu, I often visit different museums and take photos.

The original has extra words and incorrect verb forms: remove the extra 'I' after 'For example,' and use 'visit' (base form) after subject 'I'. Use plural 'museums' and 'photos'. Also 'to visit' is unnecessary because 'I often visit' is correct for habitual action.

× Oh, I think it depends on situation and if I live in a big city, just in Shanghai and you can see many model skyscrapers and busy streets because they're lively and exciting.

✓ Oh, I think it depends on the situation. If I live in a big city, like Shanghai, you can see many modern skyscrapers and busy streets because they're lively and exciting.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'situation'. 'Just in Shanghai' is awkward—use 'like Shanghai'. 'Model skyscrapers' is incorrect in this context; use 'modern skyscrapers'. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× But I also appreciate the role I play rural.

✓ But I also appreciate rural areas.

The original sentence uses an incorrect pronoun phrase 'the role I play rural' which is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is appreciation for rural areas; simplify to 'I appreciate rural areas'.

× I think is is depend on the situation, because when you live your own city, you will see the buildings, the people every day.

✓ I think it depends on the situation, because when you live in your own city, you see the buildings and the people every day.

Use 'depends' (third-person singular present) instead of 'is is depend'. Include preposition 'in' with 'live in your own city'. For general truths/habits, use present simple 'you see' rather than 'you will see'.

× Then you might think it's boring and and then you went to the next then a new country.

✓ Then you might think it's boring, and you might want to go to a new country.

Original repeats 'and' and uses past tense 'went' incorrectly. Use 'might want to go' to express possibility and intention. Simplify structure to avoid repetition.

× For example, when I.

✓ For example, when I travel abroad, I feel excited to see new places.

The fragment 'For example, when I.' lacks a verb and completes no thought. Provide a complete clause with subject and verb; here 'when I travel abroad, I feel excited...' fits the context and completes the sentence.