Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., 'the the'), and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes to preserve memories, and as an architect I focus on buildings’ shapes and details to study design.

Sugestão: Correct vocabulary errors ("brutal" → "rural") and reduce fillers like 'uh' and 'actually'. Use one linking word to compare and give a precise reason for each preference, keeping answers within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I enjoy both urban and rural views. For instance, city rooftops appeal to me because the skyline and lights at night feel exciting, whereas I value rural scenes for their peacefulness and natural beauty.

Sugestão: Fix vocabulary and grammar mistakes (e.g., 'since both' → 'both in', remove 'uh', 'live visiting familiar sports' unclear). Provide a clear topic sentence, then two specific supporting reasons using linking words like 'however' or 'also'.

Exemplo: I enjoy views both in my own country and abroad. At home, familiar places feel comforting and meaningful; however, when I travel I like discovering new landscapes and sharing those fresh experiences with my family.

× As an architect, I also enjoy photographing buildings and architectural detail, especially the the.

✓ As an architect, I also enjoy photographing buildings and architectural details, especially the details.

The sentence had a repetition 'the the' and used the singular noun 'detail' where plural 'details' is more natural to refer to multiple features. Use plural when referring to various architectural elements. Also clarify redundancy by choosing either 'architectural details' or 'the details'. Suggestion: Remove duplicated word and use plural 'details' to match the intended meaning.

× Actually, I enjoy both urban and brutal areas.

✓ Actually, I enjoy both urban and rural areas.

The word 'brutal' is incorrect in this context; the correct adjective is 'rural' to describe countryside areas. This is a word choice error (adjective misuse). Suggestion: Use 'rural' when contrasting with 'urban'.

× Uh, for example, I love rooftop city views because they both link skyline and twinkling lines at night feels exciting and energetic,

✓ For example, I love rooftop city views because the skyline and the twinkling lights at night feel exciting and energetic,

This sentence had several structural problems: incorrect pronoun 'both' and verb agreement 'feels' with a plural subject. 'Both' is unnecessary. 'Twinkling lines' is unnatural; 'twinkling lights' is appropriate. The compound subject 'the skyline and the twinkling lights' is plural, so the verb should be 'feel'. Suggestion: Remove 'both', use 'lights', and match verb number to the plural subject.

× I enjoy views since both uh, my own country and abroad.

✓ I enjoy views in both my own country and abroad.

Original sentence is missing the correct preposition and has awkward word order, making it effectively without a proper verb-object relationship. Use 'in both my own country and abroad' to indicate locations where the speaker enjoys views. Suggestion: Place 'in' before 'both' and remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× At home, I live visiting familiar sports because they feel comfortable and meaningful.

✓ At home, I like visiting familiar spots because they feel comfortable and meaningful.

Several word choice errors: 'live' is incorrect here; 'like' matches the intended meaning. 'Sports' should be 'spots' (places). The rest is acceptable. Suggestion: Use 'like visiting' and 'spots' to convey visiting familiar places.

× But when I travel, I love discovering new landscapes and sharing those fresh experience with my family and friends.

✓ But when I travel, I love discovering new landscapes and sharing those fresh experiences with my family and friends.

'Experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match 'those'. This is an adjective/adverb/number usage issue (plural form). Suggestion: Use plural to agree with 'those' and the countable noun.