Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện: Giảm các tiếng ngập ngừng (umm, uh), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và rút gọn để tránh lặp ý. Nên sử dụng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc và bổ sung một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ nơi hoặc thời điểm chụp) để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ sửa cấu trúc: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu lý do và một ví dụ ngắn.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views, especially sunsets. I love natural landscapes because their colors and light change so dramatically at dusk, which makes each photo unique. For example, last month I photographed the sunset over a nearby river and was fascinated by the reflections on the water.

Sugestão: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ (actually, really) và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp / chọn từ (ví dụ: 'veil' sai; 'unwind' cần là 'unwound' hoặc 'relaxed'). Nên có câu chủ đề ngắn, lý do rõ ràng, kèm một liên từ để nối và một ví dụ cụ thể. Chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và phát âm từ vựng chính xác.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because the peaceful countryside helps me relax after a busy day. For instance, I often walk by rice fields nearby and the quiet atmosphere and fresh air always recharge my energy.

Sugestão: Cải thiện: Loại bỏ lặp ý và sửa lỗi từ/ cấu trúc ('sing' có vẻ sai, có thể là 'stay' hoặc 'visit'; 'unwind' dùng sai dạng). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, nêu 2 lý do ngắn gọn với liên từ, và kết bằng một ví dụ cá nhân cụ thể để nội dung đặc sắc hơn.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because they give me a strong sense of connection and remind me of my childhood. For example, visiting my hometown beach always brings back memories of family outings and makes me feel relaxed and at home.

× Yes I definitely do.

✓ Yes, I definitely do.

The sentence needs a comma after Yes for natural written English. No grammatical error beyond punctuation; add comma to improve clarity.

× I love taking pictures of different views especially umm a sunset.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views, especially sunsets.

Use plural 'sunsets' to match 'different views' (singular/plural consistency) and add a comma before 'especially' for clarity. Avoid filler sounds like 'umm' in formal responses.

× Actually I am a person who really love seeing natural like uh, landscape.

✓ Actually, I am a person who really loves seeing natural landscapes.

The relative clause 'who really love' must agree with singular subject 'person', so use 'loves'. Use plural 'landscapes' to match 'natural' in general. Remove filler 'uh' and add comma after 'Actually'.

× So umm that's why I really love taking pictures of different views in urban area or rural areas.

✓ So that's why I really love taking pictures of different views in urban or rural areas.

Use 'urban or rural areas' (parallel structure) and include definite/consistent plural 'areas'. Remove filler 'umm' and ensure parallel structure.

× Actually I prefer a view in rural areas because actually I am a person who really like in who really into seeing veil in rural areas because it's make me feel so unwind after a long day or also recharge my battery.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in rural areas because I really enjoy seeing the scenery there; it makes me feel relaxed after a long day and helps me recharge.

Many issues: 'a view in rural areas' is inconsistent—use plural 'views'. 'a person who really like in who really into' is ungrammatical—use 'I really enjoy'. 'veil' is wrong word; use 'scenery'. 'it's make' should be 'it makes' (subject-verb agreement). 'so unwind' is incorrect: use 'relaxed'. 'recharge my battery' is informal metaphor; 'recharge' alone or 'recharge my energy' is better. Combine into coherent sentence and fix tense/agreement.

× Actually I prefer views in my own country because it gives me a sense of connection, also give me a sense of belonging and it helps me, it helps me remember a lot of my childhood and I feel so unwind and recharge when I sing in my own country.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in my own country because they give me a sense of connection and belonging, and they help me remember much of my childhood; I feel relaxed and recharged when I am in my own country.

Problems: 'it gives' must agree with plural 'views' so use 'they give'. Repetition 'it helps me, it helps me remember' is redundant—streamline. 'remember a lot of my childhood' -> 'remember much of my childhood'. 'feel so unwind and recharge' is ungrammatical—use 'feel relaxed and recharged'. 'when I sing in my own country' seems wrong word 'sing'; likely 'am' or 'stay'—use 'am in my own country'. Overall fix subject-verb agreement and verb forms.