Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and an example. To improve, shorten redundant phrases, add one linking phrase to connect idea and example, and include a brief specific detail (e.g., how you take the photos or what makes a sunset memorable) to enrich content without exceeding 5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of different scenes because they create lasting memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets—especially when the sky turns orange and purple—using my phone to capture the colors so I can remember the mood. These pictures from family gatherings also help me recall who was there and what we celebrated.

Sugestão: Good structure and clear reasons with linking comparisons. To improve further, vary vocabulary slightly, avoid repeating 'views' and 'areas', and add one brief specific example or contrast (e.g., a typical rural scene vs a typical urban scene) to make the answer more vivid and precise.

Exemplo: I prefer rural scenery because it offers a serene atmosphere, abundant greenery and clean air. For example, a hillside with grazing sheep and a winding stream is much more relaxing than a city street filled with honking cars and high-rise buildings.

Sugestão: The answer has good content ideas but contains grammatical errors, run-on sentences and an unfinished ending. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., 'I prefer'), use linking words to separate reasons, and finish the contrast. Also provide one concise specific example of a domestic scene and avoid ending abruptly.

Exemplo: I prefer scenery in my own country because it features rolling hills, winding rivers and peaceful lakes that help me relax. For instance, I enjoy walking by a quiet lakeside near my hometown where the air is fresh and the vegetation is diverse, whereas views abroad I’ve seen tend to be busier and less tranquil.

× Yes, I love taking photos of different scenes because they've become lasting memories.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos of different scenes because they have become lasting memories.

The contraction 'they've' is acceptable but can be ambiguous in spoken transcripts; expanded form 'they have' clarifies the present perfect tense showing a past action with present relevance. No grammatical error in tense, but using full form improves clarity.

× For example, I often photograph sunsets and family gatherings so I can look back and remember special moments and keep it for a lifetime.

✓ For example, I often photograph sunsets and family gatherings so I can look back, remember special moments, and keep them for a lifetime.

Parallel structure requires consistent verb forms and matching pronouns. 'Look back and remember' should be separated by a comma and followed by 'and keep them' because 'moments' is plural; using 'it' is incorrect. Use 'them' to match plural antecedent and ensure parallel verbs.

× I usually prefer views in rural areas because they offer a serene atmosphere, lots of greenery and natural beauty.

✓ I usually prefer views in rural areas because they offer a serene atmosphere, lots of greenery, and natural beauty.

When listing three or more items, include a comma before the final conjunction (Oxford comma) for clarity. This is a punctuation/style correction within adjective/adverb usage to improve readability.

× The open, spacious and fresh air make them much more relaxing than crowded urban streets full of buildings and traffic.

✓ The open, spacious air and greenery make rural areas much more relaxing than crowded urban streets full of buildings and traffic.

Original sentence has awkward listing and subject mismatch: 'The open, spacious and fresh air' is unclear and the verb 'make them' lacks a clear antecedent. Rewriting clarifies subjects ('open, spacious air and greenery') and explicitly compares 'rural areas' to urban streets for coherence and correct subject-verb agreement.

× Will I prefer the scenery in my own country because it has so much natural beauty, from rolling landscape and winding rivers to clear lakes and dense greenery for instance, I enjoy visiting the countryside weather, diverse vegetation and peaceful views help me relax, whereas views abroad often feel more crowded and.

✓ I prefer the scenery in my own country because it has so much natural beauty, from rolling landscapes and winding rivers to clear lakes and dense greenery. For instance, I enjoy visiting the countryside: the weather, diverse vegetation, and peaceful views help me relax, whereas views abroad often feel more crowded.

Multiple problems: 'Will I prefer' incorrectly uses future-question form; simple present 'I prefer' fits the question about preference. Sentence run-on and missing articles/plural forms ('rolling landscape' -> 'rolling landscapes'); missing punctuation caused fragments and unclear pronoun references. Split into two sentences, correct plurals, add articles where needed, and remove dangling 'and' at end. This fixes tense, sentence structure, and plural errors.