Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), and fix misused words (e.g., “panoramic views error”). Add one specific detail about what you like to capture and why. Use a linking phrase when adding a reason or an example.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. I especially like capturing panoramic landscapes because they remind me of special moments, so I save them on my phone and sometimes print a few to hang on my wall.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear preference or balanced view and correct the mixed-up descriptions (urban = tall buildings/malls, rural = nature). Use linking words to contrast and provide specific reasons or examples. Remove fillers and make sentences shorter (max 5).

Exemplo: I like both urban and rural views for different reasons. For example, I enjoy urban scenes for their tall buildings and lively streets, while rural views appeal to me because of peaceful fields and natural scenery.

Sugestão: Clarify meaning and correct word choice (e.g., “exhausting” → “eager” or “excited”). Give a concise topic sentence and one supporting reason for each choice, using linking words to show contrast or addition. Limit to 3–4 short sentences and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I enjoy views both in my own country and abroad. Locally, landscapes often remind me of childhood memories, while views overseas excite me because I can discover new cultures and different scenery.

× I love to record different views and for memories and whenever I see the panoramic views error or the iconic view somewhere, I love to take the pictures uh, so I can store them in my uh, phone memory or either I can print them and paste them on my wall of the room.

✓ I love to record different views for memories, and whenever I see a panoramic or iconic view somewhere, I love to take pictures so I can store them in my phone memory or print them and paste them on my wall.

The original sentence misuses 'and for memories' and has awkward preposition and article use ('on my wall of the room'). 'For memories' should follow 'record different views' without an extra conjunction, and 'on my wall' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also 'take the pictures' is better as 'take pictures' (general reference). Suggestions: place prepositional phrases immediately after the verb they modify and use 'on my wall' not 'on my wall of the room'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I love to record different views and for memories and whenever I see the panoramic views error or the iconic view somewhere, I love to take the pictures uh, so I can store them in my uh, phone memory or either I can print them and paste them on my wall of the room.

✓ I love to record different views for memories, and whenever I see a panoramic or iconic view somewhere, I love to take pictures so I can store them in my phone memory or print them and paste them on my wall.

The phrase 'the panoramic views error' is unclear and 'the panoramic views' uses the definite article incorrectly; 'a panoramic or iconic view' is more natural when referring to an unspecified single view. Also 'the pictures' is unnecessarily specific; 'take pictures' is appropriate. Suggestion: use 'a' for unspecified singular nouns and omit 'the' when speaking generally. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I like both, uh, the urban areas and the rural areas, uh, because urban areas, they are more close to nature and I can enjoy the Mother Nature closely.

✓ I like both urban and rural areas because urban areas are closer to nature and I can enjoy Mother Nature closely.

The original repeats the subject ('urban areas, they are') which is redundant and has incorrect comparative form 'more close' instead of 'closer'. 'Mother Nature' does not require 'the'. Suggestions: remove redundant pronoun and use the comparative adjective 'closer'. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× And uh, for the rural areas, uh, I like to watch the tall buildings and, uh, beautiful malls.

✓ And for urban areas, I like to watch tall buildings and beautiful malls.

The student mixed up 'rural' and 'urban' contexts: tall buildings and malls belong to urban areas. The preposition 'for the rural areas' is odd when describing urban features. Suggestion: match features to the correct area and use 'watch' less commonly for buildings—'see' or 'visit' is more natural. (Kept 'watch' as in original but recommend 'see' or 'visit'.) Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I prefer both in my country and in foreign country, uh, in my hometown.

✓ I prefer both my country and foreign countries, and also my hometown.

'In foreign country' is missing an article and number agreement; use 'foreign countries' or 'a foreign country'. 'Both in my country and in foreign country' is awkward; 'I prefer both my country and foreign countries' expresses the intended contrast. Suggestion: use plural or include 'a' for singular and keep parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Whenever I see something, it reminds me of my childhood and my connection to those places.

✓ Whenever I see something, it reminds me of my childhood and my connection to those places.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no tense error detected. No correction needed. (No grammar problem from list applies.) Grammar problem type ID: 6

× And I'm always exhausting and excited to explore new cultures and new landscapes.

✓ And I'm always exhausted and excited to explore new cultures and new landscapes.

The student used 'exhausting' (a present participle adjective meaning 'causing tiredness') instead of 'exhausted' (a past participle adjective meaning 'feeling tired'). Use 'exhausted' to describe the speaker's feeling. Suggestion: differentiate '-ing' (causing) from '-ed' (experiencing) when describing emotions. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× And so I want to, I like to enjoy the both views.

✓ So I want to enjoy both kinds of views.

The original is redundant and ungrammatical: 'I want to, I like to enjoy the both views' mixes two verbs and misuses the article 'the' with 'both'. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and uses 'both kinds of views' for clarity. Suggestion: choose one main verb and use 'both' without 'the'. Grammar problem type ID: 26}]} invés