Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and grammatical errors, and use varied vocabulary. Use linking words to add one or two specific supporting details (why you enjoy it, what kinds of cameras or moments). Pronunciation and sentence structure need attention (e.g., 'taking photos', 'landmarks', 'nostalgic' instead of 'old feeling').

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, such as mountains, beaches and city landmarks. For example, I often use a vintage camera because its nostalgic tones make my travel memories feel more vivid. Additionally, I like capturing wide landscapes to show the scale of a place.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: give a direct topic sentence and then one or two clear reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and repeat words. Use correct plural/possessive forms and more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'nature', 'fresh air', 'outdoors'). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I love nature and fresh air. For instance, I often go hiking to enjoy quiet forests and wide-open fields, which helps me relax after living in a busy city. Therefore I choose countryside scenery for photography and relaxation.

Sugestão: Be clearer and avoid invented or unclear words (e.g., 'Biosome', 'breeds', 'spell in love'). Start with a direct statement of preference, give specific reasons and an example, and use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Use correct structure and vocabulary for describing architecture and atmosphere.

Exemplo: I admire Seoul, but I prefer visiting other countries, especially Germany, because I love historic city centers and classical architecture. For example, the cobblestone streets and old buildings in cities like Heidelberg feel very atmospheric, which inspires my photography.

× I like taking photo of different views like mountains or sea or beaches or the landmark from other cities.

✓ I like taking photos of different views like mountains, the sea, beaches, or landmarks from other cities.

The noun 'photo' should be plural 'photos' because it refers generally to multiple pictures. 'Sea' is usually preceded by the definite article 'the' when speaking of a specific body of water in general. 'Landmark' should be plural 'landmarks' to match the list of multiple examples. Also use commas to separate items in a list.

× And I also love taking pictures with the old feeling camera.

✓ And I also love taking pictures with an old-style camera.

The phrase 'old feeling camera' is not correct English. Use 'old-style' (adjective) to describe the camera's vintage appearance. Use the indefinite article 'an' before a vowel sound ('old-style'). This makes the adjective-noun combination natural.

× It makes me remember more, Remember Me longer.

✓ It helps me remember more, and remember longer.

'Makes me remember' is acceptable but 'helps me remember' is more natural. 'Remember Me' with capitalization is incorrect. Use parallel structure 'remember more and remember longer' or 'remember longer' to express duration. Also remove unnecessary capitalization.

× I prefer views of rural areas because I like natures and the fresh vibe of that.

✓ I prefer views of rural areas because I like nature and the fresh vibe there.

'nature' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'natures.' Replace 'the fresh vibe of that' with 'the fresh vibe there' for natural reference to rural areas.

× So I'll also enjoy hiking and traveling.

✓ So I also enjoy hiking and traveling.

The future 'I'll' (I will) suggests a future habit, but the question asks general preference; present simple 'I also enjoy' is appropriate. Use present simple for habitual likes.

× The natures, uh, because I live in, in the city like urban areas, so I cannot feel that in sometimes.

✓ I don't experience that because I live in the city, in an urban area, so I sometimes can't feel it.

Original sentence has disfluent fragments and incorrect plural 'natures.' Reorder to clear subject-verb structure: 'I don't experience that because I live in the city, in an urban area, so I sometimes can't feel it.' This fixes word order and pronoun references.

× So I need more nature.

✓ So I need more nature.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It uses 'nature' correctly as an uncountable noun. Provided here to acknowledge correctness.

× I really love Biosome my country's Seoul, South Korea, but I prefer other countries like Europe especially in Germany because I love like old city and architecture and buildings and breeds in Germany so I prefer them.

✓ I really love my country, South Korea, especially Seoul, but I prefer other places in Europe, especially Germany, because I love old cities, architecture, and buildings in Germany.

Original contains nonwords ('Biosome'), mixed noun phrases, incorrect use of 'countries like Europe' (Europe is a continent), and 'breeds' is incorrect. Reorder to: 'I really love my country, South Korea, especially Seoul, but I prefer other places in Europe, especially Germany, because I love old cities, architecture, and buildings.' This fixes pronoun reference, plurality ('cities'), and removes incorrect words.

× So I will spell in love when I visit in Germany so.

✓ So I will fall in love when I visit Germany.

'Spell in love' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'fall in love.' Also use 'visit Germany' (no preposition 'in' after 'visit'). Remove the trailing 'so.' This corrects verb collocation and preposition use.