Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, loại bỏ lặp từ và làm câu mạch lạc hơn. Nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ bằng liên từ (ví dụ: because, so, when). Chú ý dùng số ít/ nhiều đúng (a picture → pictures) và tránh dùng từ không rõ (photo) một cách đơn lẻ; thay bằng cụm từ hoàn chỉnh như “take photos”. Hạn chế câu quá ngắn hoặc rời rạc; giữ tối đa 3–4 câu tự nhiên.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it lets me capture beautiful landscapes. I often bring my camera when I travel or go to work, so I can take pictures whenever I see something interesting. I also sometimes use my phone camera if carrying a camera is inconvenient.

Sugestão: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ (rural area → rural areas; than → to). Diễn đạt rõ ràng lý do bằng cách dùng liên từ và câu bổ trợ, tránh từ ngữ sai nghĩa như “food rolls of tree and river”. Cần mô tả cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: fields, trees, rivers) và dùng cấu trúc gợi cảm xúc ngắn gọn. Giữ 2–3 câu hợp lý.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because I grew up in the countryside. I like the fields, trees and rivers there, as they make me feel relaxed and bring back childhood memories.

Sugestão: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng (own country vs other countries). Tránh cấu trúc vụng về và lỗi từ vựng như “reflector” hay lặp từ không cần thiết. Nên nói lý do cụ thể vì sao ưu tiên cảnh ở quê nhà (văn hóa, kỷ niệm) và có thể thêm một câu ngắn nói rằng bạn cũng thích cảnh nước ngoài vì sự đa dạng. Dùng liên từ để nối ý.

Exemplo: I prefer the views in my own country because they reflect my culture and hold many memories for me. However, I also enjoy scenery in other countries because they offer different landscapes and new perspectives.

× I like taking a picture because I can can capture landscape.

✓ I like taking pictures because I can capture landscapes.

The student repeats 'can' (typo) and uses 'a picture' and 'landscape' incorrectly. After 'like' when referring to a general activity, use plural 'pictures' or 'taking pictures'. 'Capture landscape' needs plural or an article: 'capture landscapes' or 'capture a landscape'. Suggestion: remove the duplicate 'can', change to plural nouns for general statements.

× I often bring my camera when I go for work or travel.

✓ I often bring my camera when I go to work or when I travel.

The phrase 'go for work' is not correct in English; the correct preposition is 'go to work'. Also add 'when I travel' to parallel the structure. Suggestion: use 'go to work' and include 'when' for consistency.

× Or I will use photo.

✓ Or I will use my phone to take photos.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject/object and unnatural noun choice 'use photo'. It is better to specify what will be used and the action: 'use my phone to take photos' or 'use a photo'. Suggestion: include an instrument and the verb 'take'.

× I prefer rural area than open area because I grew up there.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas because I grew up there.

Comparisons in English use 'prefer A to B'. 'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally. 'Open area' is unclear; likely student meant 'urban areas' or 'open spaces'. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' and use plurals for general preferences.

× I like the food rolls of tree and river.

✓ I like the scents of trees and rivers.

The phrase 'food rolls of tree and river' is ungrammatical and unclear. Perhaps the student meant 'the smells/sights of trees and rivers' or 'the food' near trees and rivers. I suggest 'scents' or 'sights' and plural nouns 'trees' and 'rivers' for general reference.

× They make me feel comfortable, relax, remind me of my childhood.

✓ They make me feel comfortable and relaxed; they remind me of my childhood.

Parallel structure is needed. Use the adjective 'relaxed' (not bare infinitive) after 'feel'. Use conjunctions and proper clause punctuation. Suggestion: keep parallel forms and connect related clauses with 'and' or semicolons.

× My beautiful my old country view for.

✓ I like the views of my beautiful, old country.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains repeated words 'my'. Reorder to form a noun phrase: 'views of my beautiful, old country'. Suggestion: remove repetition and place adjectives before the noun.

× It is similar with me and reflector my culture and memories.

✓ They are similar to me and reflect my culture and memories.

Use 'similar to' not 'similar with'. 'Reflector' is the wrong form; use the verb 'reflect'. Also 'it' should be 'they' if referring to 'views'. Suggestion: use 'similar to' and the correct verb form 'reflect'.

× I also enjoy the view in also.

✓ I also enjoy the views there.

The phrase 'the view in also' is incorrect. Use a clear location word like 'there' or 'in other countries': 'I also enjoy the views there' or 'I also enjoy the views in other countries.' Suggestion: replace vague preposition phrase with 'there' or 'in other countries'.