Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce repetition, use a clear topic sentence, and add one specific detail about what you enjoy photographing. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use appropriate verb forms (e.g., “pictures” not “picture picture”).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I recently bought a professional camera so I can capture high-resolution landscapes, especially sunsets and city skylines.

Sugestão: Start with a clear, concise preference sentence, avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., “prefer rural areas” not “prefer rural areas better”), and support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words like “because” or “for example.”

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because they offer natural landscapes and peaceful surroundings. For example, I like photographing rolling hills and quiet rivers, which you rarely find in crowded cities.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, correct tense and grammar, and include specific examples with linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Keep it concise and finish your final sentence. Mention why those places impressed you and contrast briefly with your country.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I experienced spectacular scenery abroad. For example, when I visited Canada in 2017, places like Lake Louise and Moraine Lake were breathtaking with lush greenery, which contrasts with the more arid landscapes in Egypt.

× Yes, I like taking picture picture.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' when referring to the general activity of photographing multiple images. Use plural form for countable nouns when talking about them in general or in repeated actions. Suggestion: use 'pictures' or 'photographs'.

× Even I bought a professional camera for this purpose exactly to take picture, take pictures with high resolution for different views.

✓ I even bought a professional camera for this purpose, to take high-resolution pictures of different views.

The sentence has article and word order issues. 'Take picture' is incorrect; use plural 'pictures' and add hyphenated adjective 'high-resolution'. 'I even' is the correct word order. Combine clauses to avoid repetition. Suggestion: 'I even bought a professional camera to take high-resolution pictures of different views.'

× I prefer rural areas better because rural areas have scenery that is not available in urban areas.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they have scenery that is not available in urban areas.

'Prefer' already expresses a comparative, so adding 'better' is redundant. Also, repeat 'rural areas' can be replaced by pronoun 'they' for conciseness. Suggestion: remove 'better' and use a pronoun to avoid repetition.

× Open areas are mostly contained building, contain not that much scenery and breathtaking scenes as in rural areas.

✓ Open urban areas mostly contain buildings and do not have as much scenery or breathtaking views as rural areas.

Incorrect verb form and noun number: use 'contain buildings' not 'contained building'. 'Not that much' should be 'do not have as much'. 'Breathtaking scenes' is better as 'breathtaking views'. Also clarify 'open areas' by specifying 'open urban areas' if contrast intended. Suggestion: use 'contain' + plural noun and comparative structure 'do not have as much ... as'.

× I prefer in other countries.

✓ I prefer views in other countries.

'Prefer' normally takes an object; 'prefer in other countries' is incomplete. Specify what is preferred: 'views'. Also remove unnecessary preposition placement. Suggestion: 'I prefer views in other countries.'

× I live in Egypt, but I prefer views in Canada because I visited Canada in 2017 and views there was magnificent.

✓ I live in Egypt, but I prefer views in Canada because I visited Canada in 2017 and the views there were magnificent.

Subject-verb agreement and past tense: 'views' is plural so use 'were' not 'was'. Add article 'the' before 'views there' for specificity. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural subject and include 'the' when referring to specific views.

× It was breathtaking, especially the green scenery because I don't have this much green scenery back in Egypt.

✓ The scenery was breathtaking, especially the green landscapes, because we do not have that much greenery in Egypt.

Awkward repetition and register: use 'green landscapes' or 'greenery' instead of 'green scenery'. 'I don't have this much' is unclear—use 'we do not have that much greenery in Egypt' for general statement. Suggestion: replace repeated words and use 'that much' rather than 'this much' for contrast with another place.

× And this green scenery like in Lake Louise, Lake Moraine, this kind of scenery I don't have here in.

✓ I mean the kind of green scenery found at places like Lake Louise and Lake Moraine, which we do not have here.

Run-on and awkward phrasing: restructure sentence to introduce examples ('places like Lake Louise and Lake Moraine') and use relative clause 'which we do not have here' to finish. Remove dangling preposition 'in'. Suggestion: use clear clauses and place examples after 'places like'.