Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your response clearer, more grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / so / therefore). Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (e.g., plural/singular, word forms).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I look at photos from a family trip, I can recall the place, the weather and how I felt, so those images preserve memories for life.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct preference and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and linking words (however, because, also). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler words like 'like' or repeated phrases.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because the countryside is quieter and cleaner, which makes for more peaceful photos. For instance, I grew up in a village where I often photograph fields and birds, so I enjoy capturing natural scenes more than busy city streets.

Sugestão: Be more specific and finish your examples. State your preference clearly (both is acceptable) and then contrast with a concrete example using linking words (for example, whereas, while). Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences; give a complete illustrative example.

Exemplo: I enjoy photographing views both at home and abroad. For example, in my country I like photographing birds and wetlands because I know the local spots, whereas when I travel overseas I focus on cultural landmarks and cityscapes to capture different lifestyles and architecture.

× I like to take a picture of different places and different views because I think that it is a memorable for our lifetime.

✓ I like to take pictures of different places and different views because I think they are memorable for our lifetime.

The student used 'a picture' and 'it is a memorable' incorrectly. Plural 'pictures' fits 'different places and different views'. 'Memorable' is an adjective that needs a noun or plural subject agreement; 'they are memorable' matches 'pictures'. Use 'they' to refer to plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when talking about multiple items and match verb and pronoun accordingly.

× We may forget the all the things but the pictures with the help of the picture we can recalling our memories and say for our lifetime as well.

✓ We may forget many things, but pictures help us recall our memories and keep them for our lifetime.

The original sentence has redundant words, incorrect article use ('the all the things'), wrong verb form ('can recalling') and awkward phrasing ('say for our lifetime'). Correct sentence simplifies structure, uses 'many things' instead of 'the all the things', uses 'help' + base verb 'recall', and uses 'keep them for our lifetime'. Suggestion: remove redundant words, use correct verb forms (help + base verb), and place objects close to verbs.

× If I talk about like if I have to choose one, I choose the rural area because the rural area are quite and clean environment.

✓ If I had to choose one, I would choose rural areas because they are quiet and have a clean environment.

Problems: unnecessary filler 'talk about like', incorrect tense for hypothetical choice (use conditional), singular/plural and agreement errors ('the rural area are quite'), adjective/adverb misuse ('quite' used instead of 'quiet'). Correction uses conditional 'If I had to choose... I would choose', plural 'rural areas' and 'they are quiet' plus 'have a clean environment'. Suggestion: use 'quiet' for peaceful, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use conditional for hypothetical situations.

× I also belongs to a rural area.

✓ I also belong to a rural area.

The verb 'belong' must agree with subject 'I'. 'I belongs' is incorrect; correct form is 'I belong'. Suggestion: use base form with 'I' and check subject-verb agreement.

× So I love to take pictures of the nature, naturals of the nature.

✓ So I love to take pictures of nature and natural landscapes.

Redundant and incorrect phrase 'the nature, naturals of the nature' is ungrammatical. Use 'nature' without 'the' and 'natural landscapes' to convey variety. Suggestion: choose concise, standard collocations like 'pictures of nature' or 'natural landscapes'.

× Uh, I prefer both. Like, uh, if I talk about my country, I really love to take pictures of the natural spaces of birds, animal, nature, environment and all that.

✓ I prefer both. If I talk about my country, I really love to take pictures of natural spaces, such as birds and animals, and the environment.

List items need correct plural forms ('animals' not 'animal') and clearer grouping. 'Natural spaces of birds' is awkward; use 'such as' to list examples. Remove filler words. Suggestion: use plural nouns, group similar items, and avoid filler words.

× And if I talk about the other country, other countries have different environment and different living conditions.

✓ If I talk about other countries, they have different environments and different living conditions.

Mixed singular/plural: 'the other country' then 'other countries'. Use consistent plural 'other countries' and plural 'environments'. Also replace 'And' at sentence start and remove redundancy. Suggestion: keep number agreement across sentence and use plural when referring to multiple countries.

× So I love to take pictures of myself, for example, uh, last week I was.

✓ For example, last week I took pictures of myself.

Original ends abruptly with 'last week I was' which lacks a main verb and completed thought. Corrected version provides a complete past-tense action matching context. Suggestion: complete sentences with a clear verb and time reference; use past tense for completed past actions.