Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, fix pronoun and verb errors, and use a linking word for the contrasting idea. Keep to at most 3–4 sentences. Specifically: say clearly you usually don’t take photos, give a brief reason, then add a conditional clause for exceptions using a linking word like “however” or “but.”

Exemplo: I don't usually take photos of views because I prefer to remember scenes in my mind. However, if a view is exceptionally beautiful, I will take a few pictures to keep as memories.

Sugestão: Provide a direct topic sentence stating your preference, correct vocabulary (use ‘rural areas’/‘countryside’, not ‘viewers’), and avoid extra filler. Give one specific reason and one brief example. Use a linking word like ‘because’ or ‘so’ correctly.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside is quieter and more relaxing. For example, the peaceful houses and open fields where I grew up help me unwind after a busy week.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear statement answering the question, correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'travel abroad' not 'go apart', and 'my country' not 'my country's'). Give a specific reason and one or two clear examples of places. Keep sentences short and coherent and use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example.’

Exemplo: I prefer the views in my own country because I haven't had the chance to travel abroad yet. For example, Vietnam has stunning spots like Ha Long Bay and Phu Quoc Beach, which I find more meaningful since they remind me of home.

× Well to be honest I'm not a big fan of taking photos so when it comes to different places I just go sightseeing and save it in my my mind.

✓ Well, to be honest, I'm not a big fan of taking photos, so when it comes to different places I just go sightseeing and keep them in my mind.

Run-on sentence and repetition error: sentence needed commas for clarity and 'save it in my my mind' is ungrammatical and repetitive. 'Keep them in my mind' matches plural 'different places'. Suggest adding commas to separate clauses and using 'keep them in my mind' or 'keep it in my memory'.

× Sometimes if their views are really beautiful so I want I will take some photos as well.

✓ Sometimes if the views are really beautiful, I will take some photos as well.

Incorrect use of filler words and conjunctions: 'so I want I will' is ungrammatical and 'their' is inappropriate without antecedent. Remove redundant words, use conditional structure 'If..., I will...'.

× Well, I was born in the countryside which is very famous for a lots of peaceful houses.

✓ Well, I was born in the countryside, which is very famous for its many peaceful houses.

Incorrect quantifier and article usage: 'a lots of' is wrong; correct form is 'many' or 'a lot of'. Also add comma before nonrestrictive clause and use 'its' to show possession. Use 'many peaceful houses' rather than 'a lots of peaceful houses'.

× So I can stay with you that I love viewers in the open areas because when I come here I feel very relaxed and peaceful as well.

✓ So I can say that I love views in open areas because when I come here I feel very relaxed and peaceful.

Pronoun and word choice errors: 'stay with you' is wrong meaning; likely 'say'. 'Viewers' is incorrect — should be 'views'. 'In the open areas' is wordy; 'in open areas' is natural. Removed redundant 'as well'.

× Well, honestly, I haven't had the opportunity to go apart, so I'm sure that I love the views in my country's.

✓ Well, honestly, I haven't had the opportunity to travel abroad, so I'm sure that I love the views in my country.

Wrong word choice and incorrect possessive: 'go apart' is wrong — intended 'travel abroad'. 'my country's' is a possessive adjective without noun; should be 'my country'. Tense 'haven't had' is present perfect and fits; keep it. Clarify vocabulary.

× You know, Vietnam is very famous for many interesting places or tourist attractions, for example, Halong Bay or Wongbing on Yacheng Beach and I love that.

✓ You know, Vietnam is well known for many interesting places and tourist attractions; for example, Ha Long Bay or Yangbing on Yacheng Beach, and I love them.

Preposition and conjunction choices: use 'well known for' or 'famous for'. Use 'and' instead of 'or' when listing. Use correct place names if intended; 'Wongbing' likely 'Yangbing'—confirm name. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to attractions. Add punctuation for clarity.