Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and concise phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct mistakes like "to taking" → "taking" and "from 7 years old" → "since I was seven." Avoid redundancy (e.g., "I find it enjoyable" and "because" repetition).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of sunsets and natural scenes. I have liked photography since I was seven, and I find it relaxing and a great way to preserve memories. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets when I visit the beach because the light changes quickly and looks beautiful.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and then specific reasons with linking words. Fix phrasing: "take photography of" → "photograph" and avoid vague words like "different." Explain what you mean by "atmosphere" and how people add interest. Limit to up to five sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: I prefer photographing urban areas. Urban scenes appeal to me because the busy streets, varied architecture, and lively crowds create interesting compositions. For instance, I often capture street vendors and colorful signs which add contrast and energy to my photos.

Sugestão: Be more concise and logical: start with a clear statement of preference, then give specific reasons using linking words. Correct awkward phrasing such as "I'm staying at my own country" → "I usually stay in my own country." Provide one concrete example to support your reason.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I travel less abroad and know many picturesque spots here. For example, I enjoy photographing local festivals and coastal landscapes that reflect our culture and seasonal activities.

× Yes, I would say I like to taking pictures of the sunset and nature.

✓ Yes, I would say I like taking pictures of the sunset and nature.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund without an extra 'to'. 'To taking' is incorrect because 'to' makes an infinitive, but 'like' pairs with either the gerund ('taking') or the full infinitive ('to take'); here the intended form is the gerund. Suggestion: use 'like taking' or 'like to take'.

× That's one of my hobbies when I'm interested from 7 years old because I find it enjoyable to take photos for remember it.

✓ That's one of my hobbies; I've been interested since I was seven years old because I find it enjoyable to take photos to remember things.

Multiple issues: 'when I'm interested from 7 years old' is ungrammatical — use 'since I was seven years old' for a continuing interest that began in the past. 'I've been interested' (present perfect) fits the context. 'to take photos for remember it' is incorrect: 'to remember things' or 'to remember them' is correct; 'remember' needs an object and should follow 'to' as an infinitive. Suggestion: use 'I've been interested since I was seven years old' and 'to remember things' or 'to remember them'.

× I never thought about that, but I think most of the time I take photography of urban areas because I like noisy places where the atmosphere is different, rather than rural areas.

✓ I never thought about that, but I think most of the time I take photographs of urban areas because I like noisy places where the atmosphere is different from rural areas.

'Take photography' is not idiomatic; use 'take photographs' or 'do photography'. Also 'where the atmosphere is different, rather than rural areas' is awkward; compare 'different from rural areas' to show contrast. Suggestion: use 'take photographs' and 'different from rural areas'.

× Also, I like it because of many people.

✓ Also, I like it because there are many people.

'Like it because of many people' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'because there are many people' to state the reason. Alternatively 'because of the many people' could work, but the clearer choice is to state existence with 'there are'. Suggestion: 'I like it because there are many people.'

× I appreciate pictures and views of different countries, but usually I'm staying at my own country, so that's why I prefer views of my own country.

✓ I appreciate pictures and views of different countries, but usually I stay in my own country, so I prefer views of my own country.

'I'm staying at my own country' misuses the present continuous and wrong preposition. For habitual situations use the simple present 'I usually stay' or 'I usually live'. Use 'in my country' not 'at my country'. Suggestion: 'I usually stay in my own country' or 'I usually live in my own country.'

× So that's not only because I don't go anywhere, but because of nature and different activities in cities.

✓ So that's not only because I don't go anywhere, but because of the natural scenery and the different activities in cities.

'Because of nature' is understandable but sounds unnatural; 'natural scenery' or 'the nature' can be clearer. Also include articles for 'different activities' when referring to specific things: 'the different activities'. Suggestion: 'because of the natural scenery and the different activities in cities.'